Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The table illustrate the seen changes in to total population of New York city between 1800 to 2000 and show second table and third table changes in population of the five district in the five city.
overall, the New York city is the highest number of population growth in this table. Despite the Manhattan city, is the second highest number population in the city. While there was a steadly rise in 2000 total 54% to 19%. The number of population are flucuated in 1900 and 2000.
In 1800 the number of population of New York City is 79,216 population they are steadly increase 8,009,185 in 2000.
The increasing the population in some cities like Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island. They increasing population is higher than Manhattan city. Others city compare to Manhttan city.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you attempt to describe the data, the summary is incomplete and lacks a clear overview of the main trends. You mention specific figures, but the analysis is fragmented and fails to make meaningful comparisons between the districts or across the time periods provided. The data interpretation is often confusing, such as the reference to '54% to 19%', which does not clearly relate to the provided tables. To improve, ensure you cover all parts of the prompt, provide a clear summary of the main features, and support your points with accurate data from the tables.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the ideas within the paragraphs are not well-connected. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and often inaccurate, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of information. For example, the transition between the general overview and the specific data points is abrupt. To improve, use linking words such as 'furthermore', 'in contrast', or 'consequently' to connect your ideas and ensure each paragraph has a clear focus, such as grouping the data by time period or by district growth patterns.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which limits your ability to describe the data precisely. There are frequent errors in word choice and form, such as 'the table illustrate' (should be 'illustrates') and 'steadly' (should be 'steadily'). You rely on simple descriptors like 'highest number' and 'increasing', which do not demonstrate the range required for higher bands. To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'experienced a significant surge', 'remained relatively stable', or 'surpassed'. Work on your spelling and ensure you use the correct parts of speech.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede communication. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('The table illustrate'), incorrect sentence structure ('The number of population are flucuated'), and misuse of prepositions. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. There is a lack of complex sentence forms, which are necessary to achieve a higher band. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct verb tenses and subject-verb agreement. Practice combining simple sentences into more complex ones using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions to improve your grammatical range.
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