Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

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The First table demonstrates how the total population of New York city changes from year 1800 to 2000. Moreover, other two table displays alternation in the residents of the five districts Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island, over the same period.

Overall, the population of New York city had increased in every 100 years by more than lakhs. Manhattan district shown as different as well as the higher popultion rather than other four district.

Firstly, the total figure of population of New York was 79,216 in 1800 subsequently it reached to 3,437,202 after a century. followed by this a rapid growth accounted in year 2000 by ratio of 8,008,185. Moreover, clarification by five different district, initially Manhattan evident approximately three quarter of population in 1800, meanwhile in 1900 and 2000 it was listed as in declining order with 54% and 19%, respectively.

Furthermore, Citizens in Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens and Staten Island recorded least proportion in 1800. Afterwards in 1900, it was rose by more than a fifth ratio of population. Inlast,

the highest and ample amount of population analyzed in the four district with 81% for the year 2000.

the population of new york city increased in every 100 years by more than 1 lakhs. Manhattan district shows as different as well as the highest population in the other four district.

the total figure of population in new york was 69,133 in 1800 and it reached to 3,437,202 after 200 years. This is a rapid growth estimated in two parts of 8,00,185. Moreover, the five different district initially approximately these quarter in population 1800, meanwhile in 1900 and 2000 it listed as the highest in other.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address the task but suffers from significant issues. The data reporting is inconsistent and often inaccurate; for example, the figures provided in the text do not consistently match the provided tables, and the repetition of data points in the latter half of the essay creates confusion. While the main features are identified, the lack of clarity in comparing the districts and the inclusion of redundant, contradictory paragraphs prevent a clear overview. The response fails to present a coherent summary of the data, leading to an under-developed analysis of the trends.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks logical progression. The structure is severely compromised by the inclusion of a second, repetitive attempt at the summary, which makes the overall flow disjointed. Paragraphing is present but ineffective due to the repetitive nature of the content. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Moreover' and 'Furthermore', but they are often applied mechanically or incorrectly, failing to link ideas smoothly. The referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the years and the districts.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often used inaccurately. Phrases like 'by ratio of' and 'ample amount of population' are unnatural and demonstrate a lack of control over collocation. There are frequent errors in word choice, such as 'alternation' instead of 'alteration' or 'variation', and 'listed as in declining order' which is imprecise. The repetition of the same data points using different, incorrect phrasing further highlights a restricted range of vocabulary. The student struggles to use precise terminology to describe statistical trends.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'other two table displays'), incorrect tense usage, and awkward sentence construction. Punctuation is inconsistent, and the misuse of articles and prepositions is common. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty, leading to confusion. The repetition of entire sentences with slight variations suggests a lack of control over sentence structure and grammatical accuracy.

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