Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The give tables illustrate that, the given statical information with regards to changes in the total population of New York City (manhattan,Brooklyn,Bronx,Queens and Staten Island) between 1800 and 2000.The units are measured in percentage.from above tables we compared and reach a reasonable conclusion.
However from the first table ,overall we will found a more population that is the year of 2000 and lowest population year is 1800 population is 76 percentage .among 5 districts in New York Manhattan is highest population in the year of 1800.when we compaire in the same year manhattan with other districts (Brooklyn,Bronx,Queens and Island) in New York is 81 percent it's reffers to each district average population is 20 percent.moreover ,in the year of 2000 all districts population is similar only not much difference we find .onthewhole, we concluded that in the year of 2000 is less population and inthe year of 1800 is high population that is nearly 79216 population .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to accurately interpret the data provided. The student incorrectly identifies the trends, stating that the population was higher in 1800 than in 2000, which contradicts the provided tables. Furthermore, the description of the district data is confusing and lacks a clear summary of the main features. The attempt to calculate percentages and averages is inaccurate and does not reflect the actual information presented in the tables. The response lacks a clear overview and fails to make meaningful comparisons between the years or the districts, resulting in a failure to address the core requirements of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks logical organization and progression. The sentences are disjointed, and the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often misused, such as the awkward transition 'However from the first table'. Paragraphing is absent, making the text difficult to follow. The referencing is unclear, particularly when discussing the districts, and the overall structure does not guide the reader through the data in a logical manner. The lack of clear paragraph breaks and the repetitive nature of the phrasing significantly hinder the flow of information.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'statical' instead of 'statistical', 'reffers' instead of 'refers', and 'onthewhole' written as one word. The student struggles to use appropriate terminology for describing data, relying on basic and often incorrect descriptors. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information accurately, and the misuse of terms like 'percentage' when referring to raw population numbers further demonstrates a lack of control over the necessary lexical items for this task.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are significant issues with sentence structure, including run-on sentences and fragments. Punctuation is inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods, and capitalization is erratic. Subject-verb agreement is often incorrect, such as 'overall we will found' and 'all districts population is similar'. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, poorly constructed sentences. These persistent errors make the text difficult to read and understand, reflecting a lack of control over basic grammatical rules.
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