Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
the table chart shows changes in the total population of new york city from 1800 to 2000 while it also shows the changes in the populatiuon of the five districts of the new york city over the same period respectively.
overall, it can be clearly seen that the highest population of new york city in all the five districts made in the year 2000 while in manhattan the highest population was made in the year 1900 and the lowest poulation in all the districts was made in the year 1800.
after analysing, it is apparent from the table that in the total population of new york city from 1800 to 2000 was accounted for 79,216,3,427,202 and 8,009,185.however, in manhattan, the average proportion of total population in the year 1800 was 60,515 and it percentage as 76%.in 1900, the total population was around 1,850,093 and it percentage was accounted for 54%.while in 2000, the total population was repersented for 1,538,096 and it proportion was dramatically declined an d reached at around 19%.
moving ahead, the total population in the other districts in the year 1800 was accounted for 18,701 and the ratio was only 24%.after that in 1900 it was sharply rose uo the population and was about 1,587,109 and the proportion was inclined at 46%.finally, in 2000 the total population of the other districts was sharply inc
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a complete summary. While it identifies some key figures, the analysis is incomplete, and the response ends abruptly mid-sentence, leaving the final data points unaddressed. The overview is present but lacks clarity, and the selection of data is somewhat disorganized. To improve, ensure all parts of the data are covered, avoid listing raw numbers without meaningful comparison, and ensure the response is finished completely. The focus should be on identifying trends and significant changes rather than merely transcribing figures from the table.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'after analysing' and 'moving ahead', which do not fit the context of a data report. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the abrupt ending significantly disrupts the flow of the text. To improve, use more natural linking phrases and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus. Improving the transition between the general overview and the specific data points will help create a more cohesive structure.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'made in the year' instead of 'occurred in' or 'reached', and 'repersented for'. The student relies on basic phrasing to describe trends, such as 'sharply rose uo'. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise vocabulary for describing data, such as 'peaked', 'fluctuated', 'accounted for', or 'proportion'. Spelling errors, such as 'populatiuon' and 'poulation', also detract from the overall quality of the writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with sentence structure, such as the run-on sentence in the first paragraph and the misuse of prepositions and verb tenses (e.g., 'it percentage as 76%'). The use of complex structures is limited and often inaccurate. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement and correct punctuation. Avoid overly complex sentences until you have mastered the basics, and proofread carefully to eliminate simple errors in articles and word forms.
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