Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This table illastrate the changes of population of new york city including others five districts of the city over the period of 1800 to 2000 .
The first table discuss the number of indiviuals living in new york . In year 1800 the world wide inhabitants were living in new york is 79,216 . By the century past in year 1900s the growth of population increased around 3,437,202 in New york . However the population increased day by day in New york in 2000s the growth of citizen is 8,009,185 .
The second table shown us the population of people living in manhattan . In 18th century the population of manhattan is 60,515 moreover the total population in percent of residents living in manhattan is 76% . After the past of century in 1900s the ratio of resident in manhattan is 1,850,093 consequently the growth of people raised upto 54% . However in 20th century the population is increased upto 19% in manhattan the total number of residents living in manhattan is 1,538,096 .
In third table shown us the population of other districts like ( Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, staten Island ). This table discribed the overall population were mentioned in third table . In 18th century the population of district is 18,701. However the total population in district the persons of resident As percent is 24% . After the century past in year 1900s the ratio of indiviuals in district is 1,587,109 so the raised of population in district upto 46% . However in 20th century the growth of people increased so fast as compare as too pervious century the total population in district upto 6,471,089. The total population of district
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the data, but the analysis is inconsistent. While you identify key figures, the interpretation of the data is sometimes inaccurate, such as mislabeling the 1800s as the '18th century' and misinterpreting the percentage changes. The summary is incomplete as the final sentence is cut off, and the overview is missing a clear synthesis of the trends. To improve, ensure you accurately identify time periods and provide a clear, concise overview of the main trends (e.g., the overall growth of NYC and the shifting distribution between Manhattan and the other districts) in the introduction or as a separate paragraph.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by repetitive sentence structures and mechanical use of cohesive devices. Phrases like 'After the past of century' and 'consequently the growth of people raised' are used awkwardly. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the abrupt ending of the final paragraph significantly impacts the coherence of the response. Using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would help improve the logical progression of your ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'population', 'increased', and 'people'. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'illastrate' (spelling), 'indiviuals', and 'discribed'. The use of 'ratio' to describe raw population numbers is inaccurate. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'surged', 'fluctuated', 'proportion', or 'accounted for', and ensure correct spelling throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies on simple sentence structures with frequent grammatical errors. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'This table illastrate', 'The first table discuss'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward phrasing. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the placement of spaces before commas and parentheses. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the text from reaching a higher band. Focusing on sentence construction and proofreading for basic errors would be beneficial.
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