Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The table illustrate the total population of New york city changes from 1800, 1900, 2000. Moreover, the other two tables show changes of the population of five disticts.

Overall, the manhattan distict 1900 population % figure was exceeds while other district 2000 populution % was at the top. The percentage of 1800 in manhattan districts was least whereas, similar was other districts was declined.

In the new york city highest figure population of 2000 was [redacted phone] wheras, the least figure in 1800 year was 79216. However, [redacted phone] was 1900 figure. Now let talk about their 5 districts one of them was Manhattan and another one was other districts. The figure that climbed at the peak is 1900 and 2000 year was [redacted phone] population 54% and [redacted phone] population 81%.

In addition the least population districts was 2000 and 1800 was [redacted phone] population 19% and 18701 (24 %). Although 1900 in namhattan was [redacted phone] (54%) and

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to clearly present the main features of the data. While it attempts to mention figures from the tables, the information is presented in a confusing and inaccurate manner. For example, the statement 'the manhattan distict 1900 population % figure was exceeds' is unclear, and the data points provided do not accurately reflect the trends shown in the tables. The response lacks a clear overview and fails to make meaningful comparisons between the districts or across the time periods. The final sentence is incomplete, which further hinders the communication of the data.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a logical structure. While there are paragraph breaks, the progression of ideas is disjointed and difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are used incorrectly or are missing, such as the abrupt transition 'Now let talk about their 5 districts'. The referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to understand which data point refers to which district or year. The overall arrangement of information is not coherent, and the abrupt ending of the text significantly impacts the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The range of vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'disticts' instead of 'districts', 'wheras' instead of 'whereas', and 'namhattan' instead of 'Manhattan'. The student struggles to use appropriate terminology to describe statistical trends, relying on repetitive and imprecise language like 'figure' and 'climbed at the peak'. The vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information clearly, and the errors occasionally impede understanding.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that distort meaning. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('The table illustrate'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. Sentence structures are often fragmented or poorly constructed, such as 'the other two tables show changes of the population of five disticts'. The lack of control over basic grammar, combined with the incomplete final sentence, makes the text difficult to read. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures being used accurately.

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