Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The table illustatres the alternations that reflects the overall resident's of new york city from 1800 to 2000,On the other hand the other table illustrate the alternations of resident's in its five districts the city that are Manhattan,Brooklyn,Bronx,Queens and as well as an island known as Staten Island over the same era.
This chart provides comparison about the residents of New York from 1800 to 2000 after alternations in the total population.
Overall,The number of residents in New York reached at its peak in other districts in 2000 standing at a number of 8,009,185 as number of residents in 1800 year seen rapidly decline in residents with a margin of only 18,701 people as 24% of the total residents.Further the residents with minor growth in the year of 1800 it become 60,515 with a 76% of its total residency in the city Manhattan.After rapid growth and alternation the number of residents in new york in 1800 increased with a number of 79,216.
On the other hand,In Manhattan the population in 1900 is reached at its peak with a number of 1,850,093 as 54% of its population and 19% in 2000 with 1,538,096 residents with its rapid growth in other district in 1900 become 1,587,109.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to clearly present the main trends. The data interpretation is confusing; for example, the description of the 1800 population figures is inaccurate and difficult to follow. The response lacks a clear overview of the significant growth in New York City over the two centuries. Furthermore, the comparison between the total population and the individual districts is poorly integrated, making it hard for the reader to grasp the key features of the data. To improve, focus on identifying the most significant changes—such as the massive overall growth—and use the data to support these points clearly rather than listing isolated figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks logical progression. The introduction is repetitive, and the body paragraphs are disjointed. While there are some attempts at cohesive devices like 'On the other hand' and 'Overall', they are often used incorrectly or do not help the flow of ideas. The paragraphing is ineffective, as the information is not grouped logically by time period or category. The referencing is also unclear, making it difficult to determine which data points correspond to which districts or years. Improving the structure by using clear topic sentences and logical sequencing would significantly enhance the coherence of the writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and contains several errors in word choice and collocation. The word 'alternations' is used repeatedly where 'changes' or 'fluctuations' would be more appropriate. There are also issues with basic terminology, such as 'resident's' (possessive instead of plural) and 'residency' (used incorrectly to mean population). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the data with precision. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more varied and accurate vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'significant increase', 'dramatic rise', or 'remained stable', and ensure that nouns and verbs are used correctly in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The table illustatres', 'the other table illustrate'), incorrect use of articles, and punctuation errors, such as missing spaces after commas and unnecessary capitalization. The sentence structures are mostly simple or contain errors when attempting more complex constructions. For instance, 'the number of residents in 1800 year seen rapidly decline' is grammatically incorrect. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and proofreading for common errors like subject-verb agreement and pluralization.
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