Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

in these paragraphs there is hug increase in population in difference of 100 years from 1800 to 1900 and there is difference population of around 3.3 million which if divided in 5 districs caan lead us to,

Manhattan have more increase in their population as compared to other 4 districts and more population can lead to many disadvantages which are deforestation,housing crisis, lack in food resource , and industralization . But there are advantages too as new york righ now it is the business hub of USA, it is because of alot of people are living and working to make opportunities for the other people.

While focusing on the other four districts there is not much population increase and lead to more rural area and less deforestation and people lack with food resource and they would be less productive compare to new york and benefits of low population is that everyone have a job or work to do and to live peacefull life rather then a stressed enviroment with alot of polution while in new york unemployement is a very big factor which people of broklyn,bronx,queens, and staten island dont have to face it.

In 2000 recently alot people got homeless and unemployed because of ai doing human's job and ai was created to decrease the workflow of human and in less money the work could be done with the help of ai or robots while in other districts in 2000's there was huge populatio0n increase due to immigrants coming to that districts for easy green card opportunities and more jobs for skilled workers and students chose other districts rather than new york city as colleges and universities are affordable and less expensive compare to new york which affects the country in housing of these population lead to deforestation,global warming, and forest fires

USA is trying to strict the immigrant policy for immigrants and also educating to people not to increase population by making them know about its disadvantages

Concusion, In my persepective USA should make people know about their own problems about the population increase and what it is causing to them, than people will take strict control of this and leading the country in good way

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0

The response fails to meet the requirements of an Academic Task 1 report. Instead of summarising the data provided in the tables, the student provides a subjective essay discussing deforestation, AI, and immigration policies, which are not present in the source material. The task requires an objective description of population trends, yet the student ignores the actual figures and trends entirely, focusing instead on personal opinions and external knowledge. Consequently, the response does not address the prompt, resulting in a very low score for task achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a logical structure suitable for a data report. While there are paragraphs, the progression of ideas is disjointed and confusing. The use of cohesive devices is weak and often misused, such as the abrupt transition in the final paragraph starting with 'Concusion'. The lack of clear focus on the data makes the overall organisation difficult to follow, as the text shifts between unrelated topics like AI and immigration without clear logical links.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'districs', 'caan', 'righ', 'alot', 'broklyn', 'populatio0n', and 'persepective'. The student relies on basic, informal language and fails to use the specific terminology required to describe statistical data, such as 'significant increase', 'fluctuation', or 'proportion'. The range is insufficient to convey complex information accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammar is poor, with frequent errors that impede communication. There are significant issues with sentence structure, including run-on sentences and fragments. Subject-verb agreement is often incorrect, for example, 'Manhattan have more increase' and 'people lack with food resource'. Punctuation is inconsistent, and there is a lack of complex sentence structures. The high frequency of errors makes the text difficult to read and understand at times.

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