Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The tables show the population about in new york and other five districts in the year of 1800 to 2000 and it's compare the population of that cities
Overall, the table show the population in new york in [redacted phone] in new york has very less population but in year 1900 it's increasing around 3 million and in year 2000 population reaching around 8 million
Among the other table show the information about the five districts and their contribution in the total population firstly we talk about the second
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 88 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. The summary is incomplete, as it stops abruptly after mentioning the five districts without providing any data or analysis for them. The overview provided is very basic and lacks the necessary detail to fully report the main features of the tables. To improve, you must ensure you cover all parts of the prompt, including a clear summary of the trends for each district, and meet the minimum length requirement to allow for full development of your ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks a clear logical structure. While there is an attempt at an introduction and an overview, the text ends mid-sentence, which prevents any coherent progression of ideas. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences or ideas together, making the writing feel disjointed. Paragraphing is also not effectively used to separate the introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. To improve, focus on using transition words like 'furthermore', 'in contrast', or 'meanwhile' to connect your points and ensure each paragraph has a clear, completed focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'the table show' and 'population' are used repeatedly without variation. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'very less population' instead of 'a small population' or 'a low population'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the data accurately or with any sophistication. To improve, try to use a wider range of synonyms and descriptive phrases, such as 'significant growth', 'dramatic increase', or 'a steady decline', to describe the changes in the data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('the table show'), incorrect preposition usage ('about in new york'), and awkward sentence construction ('it's compare the population of that cities'). The sentence structures are simple and lack the complexity required for higher bands. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with a lack of proper capitalization for proper nouns like 'New York'. To improve, focus on basic sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and ensuring that your sentences are complete and grammatically sound.
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