Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The table below describes the changes in population of NewYork city from 1800 to 2000, Meanwhile sceond and third table show the changes in population of five districts of the city Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens and Staten island over the same period .
Taking about the first table , it describes the over all changes in population of NewYork city from years to number of population.In 1800 the demographic growth is 79,216 which rises in 1900 with amount of 3,437,202 and it continue at 8,009,185 in 2000 .
The demographic growth in city Manhattan is relatively advance the highest percentage of growth is 76% in 1800 but in 1900 it slightly drop at 54% and than stright 19%in 2000 .
In other districts the percentage of total number of poplutation is reduce in 1800 and rise in 2000 if we compare 1800 year the total percentage is 24% and t46% in 1900 but in 2000 its on its peak with total percentage of 81%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear or accurate summary of the data. While it mentions the total population figures, the analysis of the district data is confusing and mathematically inaccurate. For example, the claim that Manhattan had a '76% growth' in 1800 is not supported by the provided tables, and the description of the other districts is vague and difficult to follow. The response lacks a clear overview of the main trends, such as the significant shift in population distribution from Manhattan to the other boroughs over the two centuries. The information provided is insufficient to give the reader a clear understanding of the data trends.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The introduction is poorly constructed with run-on sentences and punctuation errors. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Meanwhile' and 'In other districts', but they are often used incorrectly or do not effectively link the ideas. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the years and the districts. The overall structure is mechanical rather than fluid, which hinders the clarity of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms like 'changes', 'growth', and 'number'. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'Taking about' instead of 'Talking about' or 'Writing about', and 'stright' instead of 'straight'. The use of 'demographic growth' is somewhat formal but is used incorrectly in the context of the data provided. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with precision, and spelling errors are frequent, which occasionally impedes the reader's understanding.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect readability. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'sceond and third table show'), incorrect preposition usage, and missing articles. Sentence structures are generally simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as 'In 1800 the demographic growth is 79,216 which rises in 1900 with amount of 3,437,202'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. These errors are frequent and represent a limited control of grammatical structures.
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