Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
This first table illustrate the total population of new york between 1800 to 2000.The trend of table show the inforamation of all five district of new york and describe the population with the passage of time period.Here,first trend in 1800 year the population of new york city is abut to 80,000.After 1 year ago the population increase the almost 35 lakhs.in 2000 the population increasing with double of pervious year.
In second table describe the five district information here the trend show the data with the precentage of population.In manhattan district here also trebds give the inforamtaion of population increasing level with the passage of time. Where the first trend tells the percentage increase in 1800 after that the the percentage decrease between 1900 to 2000.
In the other 4 district there is also given data show with percentage in these city population level decrease betwen 1800 to 2000. in 1800 the populationabois less than 30%, this percentage level increase in 1900 to 2000 about near 90%
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The student attempts to address the task by mentioning the total population and the five districts across the years 1800, 1900, and 2000. However, the data reporting is severely inaccurate and confused. For example, the statement 'After 1 year ago the population increase the almost 35 lakhs' misreads the time intervals and employs non-standard numbering units. The description of the percentage changes for Manhattan and the other districts is also garbled, misinterpreting the actual trends shown in the tables. There is no clear overview provided. This corresponds to a Band 4.0 as it responds to the task only minimally and contains inaccurate data selection.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression within and between them is very weak. The student attempts to use transition phrases like 'Here, first trend in 1800 year' and 'In second table describe', but cohesive devices are inaccurate, overused, or poorly managed. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the relationship between the different tables and the data points. Paragraphing is present but fails to structure the information in a coherent academic manner. This performance aligns with Band 4.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, featuring frequent word-formation errors and inappropriate terms, such as 'inforamation', 'trebds', 'precentage', and 'lakhs'. The range of vocabulary is extremely limited and inadequate for an academic task, failing to accurately describe statistical trends such as increases, decreases, or proportions. Spelling and word choice errors are pervasive and occasionally strain the reader's understanding. This reflects the criteria for Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response demonstrates a very limited range of sentence structures, relying on simple, faulty constructions. There are persistent, fundamental grammatical errors throughout the text, including missing auxiliary verbs ('the population of new york city is abut to 80,000'), tense confusion ('population increasing with double'), and incorrect prepositions ('in these city population level decrease'). Punctuation and capitalization are also erratic. Errors are frequent and often distort the intended meaning, matching the Band 4.0 level.
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