Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The first table gives the detail of changing in number of peoples of New York from 1800 to 2000, another tables indicates the information of citizens of five districts of the urban (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) of the two centuries.
According to the table data, In 2000 the population of the New York recorded 2000 which is the highest number. Whenever, In 1900 the percentage of public recorded high with 54 % in Manhattan, On the other hand In 2000 remaining four districts seemed high number of inhabitate.
However, In 1800 year population was low, in New York, Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, and Staten Island. In 1900 year growth of people were average.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, stopping at only 115 words, which directly impacts the completeness of the task. Furthermore, the selection of data is extremely limited and contains factual inaccuracies. For instance, the student states that 'in 2000 the population of the New York recorded 2000 which is the highest number,' which misreads the provided data (8,009,185). While the response attempts an overview by mentioning the five districts and the two centuries, it lacks a fully developed summary of the main trends shown in the tables, such as the massive overall population growth and the shifting distribution from Manhattan to the other districts.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The response is divided into three short paragraphs, attempting an introduction and body paragraphs, but the overall organisation lacks a clear progression. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as 'Whenever, In 1900' and 'On the other hand In 2000,' which do not establish appropriate logical relationships between ideas. Referencing and referencing pronouns are also confusing, resulting in a disjointed flow that requires the reader to work hard to follow the connections between sentences.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
Vocabulary usage is basic, repetitive, and frequently inaccurate. The student uses unnatural phrasing such as 'changing in number of peoples,' 'citizens of five districts of the urban,' and 'high number of inhabitate.' There are noticeable word choice errors ('peoples' instead of 'population' or 'people', 'inhabitate' instead of 'inhabitants') and spelling or form errors that occasionally impede understanding. The range of vocabulary is severely limited and lacks the precision required for Academic Task 1.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical structures attempted are very limited, consisting mostly of simple or faulty complex sentences. There are frequent errors in grammar, word form, and punctuation throughout the text, such as 'gives the detail of changing,' 'population of the New York recorded 2000,' and 'growth of people were average' (subject-verb agreement error). These errors occur constantly across the short text and frequently strain the reader's comprehension.
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