Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The table's illustrate that information of echanging in total population of New-York city. The scale is given in the percentage and the four categories listed named Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten island.
Overall, the highest population capture in manhattan and the lowest in Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten island.
To begin with, The population in all five district was equivelent but in 1800 the overall population is 79,216. but individually manhattan populaion is 60,515 and that percentage of total population is 76%and remains 18,701 cover the other four disteict by 24%. Moreover, in 1900 same same Manhattan population is 18,50,093 by 54% and others covers 15,87,109 by 46% and overall 5 district population is 34,37,202.
Additionally, in 2000 the population decrease in the manhattan and that was 15,38,096 and the percentage is 19% and the remaining four is Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten island population in percentage is 81% and population is 64,71,089 and in this year population is highest.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response attempts to address the task by reporting figures from the tables, such as the total population in 1800 (79,216) and Manhattan's figures over the years. However, the data handling is confused and inaccurate in places. For instance, the student states that the population in all five districts was equivalent in 1800, which is not supported by the data. The overview attempted in the second paragraph is underdeveloped and ungrammatical ('the highest population capture in manhattan'). While some main features are mentioned, the lack of clarity and inaccurate comparisons pull the score down into the lower bands.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The text is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is frequently disrupted by poor cohesive devices and confusing transitions like 'To begin with' and 'Additionally'. Referencing is weak and repetitive, particularly when listing the other four districts ('Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten island') multiple times in full. The overall structure attempts to follow an introduction, overview, and body paragraph format, but the lack of clear progression and mechanical linking places this aspect at Band 4.5.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
Vocabulary is very basic, repetitive, and often misused. Examples include 'echanging' instead of changing, 'capture' instead of captured, and 'equivelent' instead of equivalent. The student repeats the full list of remaining districts multiple times ('Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten island') rather than using effective lexical chunking or referencing terms like 'the other four districts'. Word formation and spelling errors are frequent throughout the response, constraining communication and placing the lexical score at Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The text contains a very limited range of grammatical structures, and simple sentences are frequently marred by basic errors. There are frequent tense inconsistencies and fragment sentences, such as 'The table's illustrate that information of echanging in total population...' and 'Moreover, in 1900 same same Manhattan population is...'. Punctuation and capitalization are also erratic, with missing capitals on proper nouns like 'manhattan' and 'staten island'. The high frequency of grammatical errors throughout every sentence restricts the score to Band 4.0.
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