Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The first tables illustrates population changes the year in 1800 to 2000. and the second and third table change in the population five districts of the city namily, manhattan,brooklyn,bronx,queens,staten and island.
Overall, when the first table are show in all five district population are increasing in 2000. then manhattan district are 76% population show and other four country in 81% increasing.
Among all sector, population in both three years dramatic change is manhattan for 2000 its 19% population are show. when the population are brooklyn,bronx,queens and staten island we four country in 1800 year population range is 18,701 and 24% are slighty decreses. on other hand 1900 year population are 1,587,109 and 46%. and in 2000 population range 6,471,089 and 81% is increasing.
Interestingly, in all districts when the population are rose on the slighty increases to show in the table first table are show population are 1800 in 79,216 then 1900 in 3,437,202 and 2000 in 8,009,185. then second table are show in the percentage of total population in the three year 76%,54% and 19% below. while the third table are shown in 2000 most population are increasing.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response attempts to address the prompt by reporting figures from the tables, such as the total population numbers for New York City in 1800, 1900, and 2000, as well as the breakdown for Manhattan and the other districts. However, the selection of data is erratic and difficult to follow due to severe language expression issues. While an overview is attempted, it is confused and fails to clearly highlight the main trends, such as the dramatic growth of the outer districts compared to Manhattan's relative decline. Key figures are stated, but many relationships and comparisons are muddied. This places the response firmly at Band 4.5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is frequently broken. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or incorrectly, such as 'when the first table are show', 'then', and 'on other hand'. Referencing is often unclear, leaving the reader confused about which data set is being referred to. Although there is an attempt at an introduction, body, and conclusion-like structure, the lack of clear logical links and faulty progression prevent the response from achieving a higher band.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and restricted. Words are frequently used in incorrect grammatical forms or wrong collocations, such as 'country' instead of 'districts', 'decreses' instead of 'decreases', and 'namily'. There are numerous spelling and word-form errors that strain the reader's understanding. While some task-specific words like 'population' and 'district' appear, the limited range and frequent inaccuracies severely restrict lexical control.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of poorly constructed, error-laden sentences. There are almost no error-free sentences in the text. Severe errors include subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'the first tables illustrates', 'table are show'), incorrect tense usage, and broken clause structures. Punctuation is also problematic, with misplaced full stops and commas. These frequent errors cause significant difficulty for the reader.
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