Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The table compares the information about variations of total inhabitants of New York City and five districts including Manhttan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten, Island from 1800 to 2000.
Overall, first table shows a complete format of information about the New York City with specified data while the other two tables expands this information and addressing the percentage value as well.
The number of population climb up from 79,216 to 8,009,185 with the tenure of 10 years from 1800 to 20000.
This in formation include the all data of five districts.
Manhattan district spotted Surge in population which is maximum at 76% in 1800, 54% in 1900 and lowest increase of 19% was in 20000 of total population.
Other four districts clinch the highest percentage of total population which is 81% in 2000 and showed the lowest trend in term of globalization value of 24% in 1800. In 1900 Manhattan district ahead with 8% increase in population as compare to other four district containing 54% and 46% respectively.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task by summarizing the provided tables on New York City's population from 1800 to 2000, but it does so only partially. While it manages to present some key features—such as Manhattan's decreasing percentage of the total population alongside the growth of other districts—the selection of data is sometimes inaccurate or confusing. For example, the writer misinterprets the timeline duration, stating there is a 'tenure of 10 years from 1800 to 20000', and introduces typos in the years. Furthermore, some of the comparisons between districts lack clarity and precision. To reach a higher level, the response needs to present a more accurate and fully developed overview of the main trends without factual distortions or confusing numerical errors.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The organization of the text lacks clear overall progression and logical flow. Although the writer attempts to divide information into paragraphs, the structure is fragmented, with several very short, isolated sentences such as 'This in formation include the all data of five districts.' Paragraphing is used insufficiently and inappropriately, breaking up related ideas rather than grouping them into a cohesive narrative. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, leading to mechanical transitions like 'Other four districts clinch the highest percentage'. Pronoun referencing and signposting are weak, making it difficult for the reader to follow the logical relationship between the tables. To improve, the writer should group related data logically and use a wider variety of accurate cohesive links to connect sentences and paragraphs smoothly.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task, with noticeable lexical errors that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary, such as 'spotted Surge' and 'clinch', but these are used with awkward collocations and imprecise word choices. There are also frequent spelling and word-form errors, including 'Manhttan', 'information', and 'globalization value', which detract from the overall quality. To achieve a higher band, the student needs to use a broader range of vocabulary more accurately, ensuring that words and collocations fit the context of statistical reporting naturally without basic spelling slips.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on basic sentence forms alongside faulty attempts at complex sentences. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including tense confusion, errors in subject-verb agreement, missing articles, and awkward prepositional phrases, such as 'The number of population climb up' and 'as compare to other four district'. Punctuation is also erratic in places. These frequent errors cause noticeable difficulty for the reader and impede clear communication. To improve, the writer must work on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and accurate grammatical forms when reporting data.
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