Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The table presents the data of changes in the total population of new york city from 1800 to 2000. Two more tables provieds data of population changes in five districts of New york over the same time period.
Overall, Population of every district increased from 1800 to 2000 except Manthan so as a result total population figure of new york rose from 1800 to 2000. At the begining Manthan was a majore contributor to the total population of new york but later on its contribution dropped from 76% to only 19% to the total population and remaining four districts became the leading contributers to the total population of New York city.
Initialy in 1800 the total population of new york city was 79216 among those 60515 people was only from Manhattan district which was 76% of the total population. And rest of four dirstrcits (Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten, Island) have a population of only 18701 people which was only 24% of the total population.
By the year 1900 total population of New York jumped to [redacted phone] and similarly population of Manthan district rose to [redacted phone] which was 54% of total population of new york city, at the same point population of all other four disctricts surges to [redacted phone] which was 46 % of total population. At 2000 Manthan population decreased to [redacted phone] which was only 19% of total population of new york that went high to [redacted phone] in year 2000. At the same time other four districts population enhanced to [redacted phone] which was around 81% of the total population of new york city.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0
The response addresses all parts of the task by reporting the main features, selecting appropriate data points, and making relevant comparisons across the specified years. You provide a clear overview at the beginning, noting the general upward trend in the total population and the shift in dominance from Manhattan to the other districts. Key figures, such as the initial and final populations and percentages, are accurately cited from the visual data. While the response covers all required aspects, some of the supporting details tend to list figures sequentially rather than fully developing analytical comparisons between the districts. However, the information presented is accurate and directly answers the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The text presents a coherent overall arrangement with a discernible logical progression from an introductory overview to specific period breakdowns. Paragraphing is used to separate the introduction, overview, and body details, which helps structure the response. However, cohesion is at times mechanical or faulty. Transitions between sentences and ideas rely heavily on basic sequencing words like 'Initialy', 'By the year 1900', and 'At 2000', and referencing can occasionally feel repetitive. While the overall logical flow is maintained, these mechanical links prevent the cohesion from being fully fluent or sophisticated.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing you to convey the main statistical changes. You attempt some less common vocabulary and lexical control, such as 'major contributor', 'percentage', and 'population figure', but there are noticeable errors in word choice and spelling throughout the text. Examples include misspellings like 'provieds', 'Manthan', 'majore', 'contributers', 'Initialy', 'dirstrcits', and 'disctricts'. Additionally, expressions like 'population of all other four disctricts surges' mix tense and collocation awkwardly. These errors show a limited lexical range with occasional inaccuracies that stem from spelling and word formation issues.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, attempting relative clauses and participial structures such as 'which was 76% of the total population'. However, control over grammar and punctuation is inconsistent, with frequent errors in articles, capitalization, and singular-plural agreement. Examples include 'changes in the total population of new york city', 'Two more tables provieds data', 'Manhattan district which was 76%', and 'rest of four dirstrcits ... have a population'. Punctuation is also sparse, leading to run-on structures like 'At 2000 Manthan population decreased to 1538096 which was only 19% of total population of new york that went high to 8009185 in year 2000.' These errors require some effort from the reader to parse.
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