Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The tables represent that how much changes were seen in total population of New York City from the year 1800 to 2000.
The different tables hold the different type of information in it. The table shows the five district of New York City population and the other table shows their district with the growth of population and how much the population is increased in that specific year.
Firstly, in 2000 it clearly seems a high wave of popultion is increased in 2000 which is more than the double of the population in 1900.
Meanwhile, other two table shows that the New York is one of the crowded district which is Manhattan. Compared them with the total population of New York, in the year 2000 a significantly increase is shown in the population as compared to other districts of New York. In the year 1800, the total percentage of Population in the Manhattan is about 76% which is quite higher than the other districts. Furthermore, a signicifantly in 2000 the growth of the total population in Manhattan is dropped to 19% while other distircts had gained a huge peak in the year 2000 their total poulation is about 81%
In conclusion, New York the city of US their districts had gained a huge poulation in numbers in the past years from 1800 to 2000.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response partially addresses the task by selecting and reporting some main features and comparisons from the tables, such as the overall population growth and the shift in proportions between Manhattan and other districts. However, the information is presented with noticeable omissions and some confusion regarding the data. For instance, the overview lacks clarity, and the description of the figures is sometimes vague or inaccurate, such as stating that the 2000 population is more than double the 1900 figure when the total went from 3.4 million to 8 million. Furthermore, some ideas are inadequately developed, reflecting a limited attempt to synthesise the statistical data provided in the multiple tables.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
There is some organisation evident in the text, moving from a general introduction to specific district comparisons and a brief conclusion. However, there is no clear overall progression, and the logical flow is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions, such as 'Meanwhile, other two table shows' and 'Compared them with the total population'. Cohesive devices are used mechanically and often inaccurately, making the connections between ideas weak. Additionally, paragraphing is poorly handled, with a series of very short, disjointed paragraphs that fail to structure the argument or group related information logically.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, though it is minimally adequate to convey the basic topic of population change. There are noticeable lexical errors and awkward word choices, such as 'high wave of popultion', 'crowded district', and 'signicifantly in 2000'. Spelling mistakes are also present, including 'popultion', 'signicifantly', and 'distircts'. Attempts to use less common vocabulary, such as 'significantly increase' (which uses the wrong word form), lead to errors that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader and prevent the response from achieving a higher level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The grammatical range is limited, relying mostly on simple and flawed complex sentence structures. There are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues like 'The tables represent that how much changes were seen' and 'other two table shows'. Articles and prepositions are also frequently misused, as seen in 'in the New York is one of the crowded district' and 'in the Manhattan'. These frequent errors require the reader to slow down and can cause some difficulty in fully understanding the intended meaning of the sentences.
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