Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The rendered both table chart depicts the information about the changes in population size in new york in usa of five districts of the urban areas such as Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, and Staten island over the corresponding time frame.
To begin with, In 1800 year, the population sizes of all five districts was about 79,216 and then in 1900 year, the population in new york city in five demanded urban areas was about 3,437,202 which were highest to the 1800 year . moreover, in 2000 year the toatal poulation in cities in usa city about 8,009,185 that were very highest to another 2 years.Furthermore, in manhattan the population size was about 60,515 thousand and the percentage of total population was 76% of this city.
Adittionaly, In 1800 and in 1900 or 2000 year its percentage was about 54% and 19% and the total population was 1,850,093 in 1800 and 1,538,096 in 2000. In adittion, the another 4 districts percentage and population was about 18,701 and percentage was 24% in 1800 year and then finally, in 1900 and 2000 the population size was about 1,587,109 ,46% in this year and 6,471,089 , 81% in this year.
Overall, it is clear that the highest population size was in 2000 year but the very lowest rate of population of all five districts was in 1800 which are very lower than another year.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response presents an overview of the main trends shown in the tables, noting the overall population growth from 1800 to 2000 and providing specific data points for Manhattan and the other districts. However, the information is not always fully or accurately reported, and there are some confusions with dates and figures, such as stating that Manhattan's population was 60,515 thousand instead of absolute numbers. While key features are identified, the development of comparisons is limited, meaning the response only partially addresses all parts of the task in a clear, well-supported manner.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is organized into paragraphs, and an overall summary is provided at the end. However, the progression of ideas is sometimes hindered by mechanical or repetitive cohesive devices, such as the frequent use of 'and then', 'moreover', and 'in addition'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the internal flow within paragraphs lacks seamless transitions, resulting in an arrangement that feels somewhat disjointed rather than steadily progressive throughout the text.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, with frequent lexical inaccuracies and awkward phrasing, such as 'rendered both table chart', 'demanded urban areas', and 'toatal poulation'. Word choices and collocations are often basic or inappropriate for academic writing. Spelling and word form errors occur regularly, which sometimes causes strain for the reader and prevents the response from achieving a higher level of lexical precision and range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response demonstrates a very limited range of sentence structures, relying primarily on simple or faulty complex constructions. There are frequent grammatical errors, including incorrect verb tenses, subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'the population sizes of all five districts was'), and missing or incorrect prepositions and articles. These frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader and reveal a lack of firm control over basic and complex grammatical forms.
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