Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In the first table we can see that the total population of new york city was highly increased by the recent year 2000 then 1800. Where total people count was rapidly change over every 100 years. In addition in other two tabels are indicating the city wise inflation, where manhattan leading at the begaining in 1800 then other four districts mentioned in the table. Which are Brooklyn,bronx,queens and last staten.

The first tables show's that the population of the New York city was too low as compare as early 2000. In 1900 it took its first noticable jump.

The secound and third table show the raise of population city wise, where manhattan's population holding high percentage at 1800 then 2000's. On the other side other four cities are less populer at early 1800 century then 2000 century.But in 20's other four cities are much populer then the manhattan.

In conclusion we can state that the popularity and depandibility of manhattan has dicressed in the 20's then other four cities. But the in general population of new york has rapidly growing.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the broad trends: New York’s total population grew, Manhattan’s share declined, and the other four districts became more significant. These are relevant features, and your comparison of Manhattan with the other districts is a useful starting point. However, the account is only partial and some descriptions are unclear or inaccurate. For example, “in 20’s” does not specify the year 2000, and saying Manhattan’s “popularity and dependability” decreased is not supported by population data. You also omit the key figures and the important fact that Manhattan’s population rose to 1,850,093 in 1900 before falling to 1,538,096 in 2000. Report the main changes precisely and avoid interpreting population as popularity or dependability.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has separate paragraphs and uses basic linking expressions such as “In addition,” “On the other side,” and “In conclusion,” so there is some organisation. However, the progression is not consistently clear: the opening combines the total-population trend with district information, and the next paragraph repeats the claim that the total population increased without adding a clear comparison. References such as “the first tables” and “other four cities” are also imprecise, making it harder to follow which data you mean. Organise the report around the overall trend, then the total population, and finally the contrast between Manhattan and the other districts. Use linking phrases only where they clarify the relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “total population,” “percentage,” and “districts,” and the reader can generally identify the subject of the report. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes obscuring your meaning. For instance, “city wise inflation” does not describe population change, while “popularity and dependability” are not appropriate for these figures. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “begaining,” “secound,” “dicressed,” and “depandibility.” Choose precise terms for numerical trends and check spelling carefully. Repeating “popular” also weakens the comparison; use language such as “accounted for a larger share” or “had a higher population” instead.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the main topic is usually understandable. However, sentence structures are often faulty, particularly when clauses are joined or introduced. For example, “Where total people count was rapidly change” is an incomplete clause with an incorrect verb form, and “The first tables show's that…” has problems with agreement and sentence construction. Articles, plurals, and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “the New York city” and the run-on spacing in “century.But.” These errors can make the reader work to understand your meaning. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use straightforward past-tense forms to describe the figures for 1800, 1900, and 2000.

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