Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Water is a basic human right to provide by nature and governments. A clean water should to use drink and use daily life bases, Depend on sectors like natural resourses and any governments include.
Firstly, with on water supply free off coast is a human with animal all include species in Earth. Most off the public use a natural and locals government to provide in specific area urban and restricted area in minmum time or slots selection bases. On the on hand of peoples in countryside mostly depend on natural and own handpamp and tubilles because they have farming some of peoples. It's free coast access to manages lifespan are mostly free in there life.
Secoundary, I disagree governments or private sectors includes a heavy charge on water comgumation. On the other hand not able to use peoples water free accessible that choose brought water with conratct some use parameters for waters. In cites peoples easily buy any contacts through but rural peoples can't because of governments and privates sectors not access and awarness them. Then people choose move to another cites and district causes of water they could not framing continues stopped that.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 194 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you attempt to address the prompt by discussing the role of government and the distinction between urban and rural water access, the arguments are underdeveloped and often unclear. The position on whether water should be free is somewhat contradictory, as you state you disagree with heavy charges but do not clearly articulate a coherent stance on the 'free of charge' proposal. To improve, you must expand your arguments with specific examples and ensure your position is consistent throughout the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is frequently interrupted by unclear phrasing and disjointed sentences. While you use some transition signals like 'Firstly' and 'Secoundary', the connections between sentences are often weak or confusing, such as in the second paragraph where the transition from urban to rural water access lacks a clear logical link. Referencing is also problematic, making it difficult for the reader to follow your train of thought. Improving the use of cohesive devices and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would greatly enhance the readability of your work.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is quite limited and there are frequent errors in word choice and spelling that impede communication. For example, 'free off coast' is used instead of 'free of cost', and 'comgumation' is used instead of 'consumption'. Many phrases are non-standard, such as 'tubilles' (likely meaning tubewells) and 'framing continues stopped'. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle to express complex ideas accurately. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning correct collocations and expanding your range of vocabulary related to social and environmental issues, while also paying closer attention to spelling.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. There are frequent errors in basic grammar, including subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence structure. For instance, 'A clean water should to use drink' is grammatically incorrect and difficult to parse. Complex structures are attempted but are almost always faulty, leading to confusion. The lack of control over basic punctuation and sentence boundaries makes the text difficult to read. You need to focus on mastering simple sentence structures before attempting more complex ones, and pay close attention to verb forms and word order.
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