Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Water is the main source for human body to survive. and to provide a clean water is government responsibility , and to maintain this facility government wants fund for the people who work for it, and also want money for gating material like pipe and sum other instruments , and for that facility we have to pay regularly tax for it.

Without money no one can work, so for that we all have to pay charge , If people are responsible and aware about the process of water cleaning and value of the clean water everyone is ready to pay for it ,

On the otherhand who have no money that people are not able to pay for the water that we have to think about it that we can provide some drinking water station for free.

As per my openion I am totally agree that clean water is a basic requirement of every humans but as a awake people of the country we all have to take this responsibility and we dont get demand for free clean water facilities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 180 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you attempt to address the prompt by discussing government responsibility and the necessity of funding, the arguments are underdeveloped and lack depth. The position is somewhat contradictory; you state that clean water is a right but then argue against it being free. To improve, you must expand your arguments with specific examples and ensure you meet the length requirement to allow for a full exploration of the topic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a clear structure. While there are paragraph breaks, the flow of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and often mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'and' to connect clauses. There is a lack of logical progression between sentences, making it difficult for the reader to follow your line of reasoning. To improve, focus on using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'however') and ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that supports your overall argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which limits your ability to express complex ideas. Phrases like 'main source for human body to survive' and 'awake people of the country' are unnatural and imprecise. There are also frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'gating material' (likely meaning 'getting' or 'procuring') and 'openion'. To reach a higher band, you need to expand your range of vocabulary to include more academic and topic-specific terms, and focus on using words in their correct context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with sentence structure, including run-on sentences and fragments. Punctuation is also problematic, with inconsistent capitalization and missing commas. You rely almost exclusively on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences are marred by errors in subject-verb agreement and article usage (e.g., 'to provide a clean water is government responsibility'). You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction before attempting more complex structures, paying close attention to articles and verb forms.

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