Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Once saying, water is the key sources in human life. Also have a quoto says, people can straving three days but no water. There means the nessarity with water to basic human right. But there is a interesting fact how people get clean water.

For centuries ago, there are none of water purify fatories, how ancient human drink clean water form river or rain falls? They creeat a placement with rocks, sands, fallen leaves also branches for frame. Pouring water for upside then collect purify water at bottom, and use fire boil it before drink. This is how people reach clean water at first time. With still some bactria and virus inside water can be visually seem, also the techology developing, human use chemical and physical way to decrease dangerous at water quality.

By the time flies, now days every family own water supply from local water purify factory. The quality depend on daily function without rest whole year, in mean while, factory workers keep their duty, they can not reunion with family even in new year eve. That is the reason i disagree water supply should have a free provide of charge. If water are free for everyone, why there still palces without enough water sources, i think the reason why they can follow rules in using,so they can't afford clean water.Otherwise, water resourse belong to every countrise government not for every living human being. We just the guest living on this blue planet, water sources department make effort for longer and countinuing using for water. Water belongs to nobody, but we should pay fee while using this origianl resource for our future generation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student attempts to address the prompt regarding whether free water supply should be a basic human right, presenting a personal disagreement position. However, the development of ideas is heavily hindered by language barriers and unclear argumentation. The response meanders through historical anecdotes about water purification and discussions of factory workers' sacrifices, making the core reasoning difficult to follow. While a stance is taken in the final paragraph, the arguments provided—such as suggesting people cannot afford clean water because they fail to follow rules, or that water belongs to governments rather than individuals—are underdeveloped and lack clear logical support. Consequently, the response addresses the task only partially, aligning with Band 5 descriptors where ideas remain limited and insufficiently supported.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks clear logical progression and structured paragraphing. The introduction relies on disconnected fragments rather than a unified thesis statement. Paragraph breaks appear random, separating the historical narrative across awkward boundaries. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, with transitions like 'By the time flies, now days' appearing unnatural and mechanical. Referencing is frequently unclear, leaving the reader to guess the connections between sentences. While the text has an overall flow related to the theme of water, the structural organization and lack of robust cohesive ties place this performance firmly at Band 4, where information and ideas are not arranged in a sufficiently coherent manner.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent word choice and collocation errors that often strain the reader. Examples include 'key sources', 'straving', 'nessarity', 'water purify fatories', and 'origianl resource'. The writer attempts some less common terms like 'purify', 'technology', and 'department', but these are undermined by incorrect word forms and spelling mistakes (e.g., 'creeat', 'bactria', 'countrise', 'countinuing'). Because the lexical range is limited and noticeable errors frequently cause difficulty in understanding intended meanings, the response meets the criteria for Band 4.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex structures that are consistently faulty. There is an absence of error-free sentences. Frequent errors include missing subjects, incorrect verb tenses, and severe punctuation issues (e.g., 'There means the nessarity with water to basic human right', 'Water belongs to nobody, but we should pay fee while using this origianl resource'). Subject-verb agreement errors and fragmented clauses appear throughout the text. Because errors are frequent, pervasive, and often distort the intended meaning, this performance warrants a Band 4 score for grammar and accuracy.

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