Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-27
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Nowdays, Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. i am firmly agree for there development. We will discus this essay why i reagrded as a agree development.
On the first hand, i am a agree for this development. The main reason is health benefit. it is largely beacuse when masses drink the dirty water. they has a many deases. sometines they after drink the drity water they died. furthermore goverment should start a clean water for small town free of charge. As a rsult small town people has a very poor. and they have enough mopney for buy a clean water.
on the other hand, The primary reason is body always nedd a clean water. It is largely beacuse our body always need a clean water beacuse when we drink a dirty water. we are suffer from many deases. I earlier mention many masses drink the dirt water as well as they suffer form a high level deases as well as they died. the main deases is dysentery. This deases is a very bad. as well as small number of people died from drink the dirty water. Dirty water is very harmful for our body. I suggest to all masses don't drink the drity water as well as always drink the clean water.
On the way of conclusion, goverment should start the supply clean water for all small town furthermore small town people has enough money to buy a clean water as well as buy a water purify.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
You state agreement in the opening (“i am firmly agree”) and give relevant reasons, especially the health risks of dirty water and the difficulty poorer communities may have paying for clean water. However, the position is not explained consistently: the conclusion says small-town residents have “enough money,” which conflicts with the earlier claim that they cannot afford clean water. The reasons are mostly repeated rather than developed with clear explanation or a specific example, and the response only minimally addresses whether every home should receive water free of charge. The response is 241 words, below the 250-word minimum; 23 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop each reason and clarify who should provide and fund the supply.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the reader can identify the broad topic of each section. However, ideas are not arranged coherently enough to build a clear argument. The two body paragraphs repeat the same point—that dirty water causes disease—without adding distinct supporting steps, while the conclusion introduces the contradictory claim that small-town people have enough money. Linking phrases such as “On the first hand,” “on the other hand” and “as well as” are used mechanically or do not show the intended relationship between ideas. Plan one main point for each paragraph, explain it in sequence, and use references and transitions only where they clarify how the ideas connect.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
You use basic vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “clean water,” “dirty water,” “health benefit” and “dysentery,” so the general subject is usually recognisable. However, the range is narrow and key terms are repeated frequently, particularly “dirty water,” “clean water” and “deases.” Numerous spelling and word-choice errors strain the reader, including “Nowdays,” “masses,” “mopney” and “water purify.” Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “start a clean water” and “high level deases.” Build a small set of accurate topic-specific expressions and check spelling and collocations; for example, describe governments as providing or supplying safe drinking water rather than “starting” it.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
You attempt to connect ideas with clauses using “when,” “because” and “as well as,” but most sentences rely on simple patterns, and frequent errors make the argument difficult to follow. Examples include “i am firmly agree,” “they has a many deases,” and “we are suffer,” which show problems with verb forms, agreement and sentence construction. Articles and plurals are also often inaccurate, as in “a clean water” and “many deases.” Capitalisation and sentence punctuation are inconsistent, with several sentences beginning in lowercase and full stops separating closely connected clauses. Practise accurate subject–verb patterns and article use first, then build longer sentences from two correctly formed clauses.
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