Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.



 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the diagram show development in beechwood farm from 1950 to today.

over all , there are huge development sheep area change into parking and camping field more over they also used lastest technology such

as solar panels for power consumption.

In 1950 whole track is changed into the road which helped people for communte. they also develop a farm shop near to fruits tress to sell fresh fruits. the location of barn is changed from main road they shifted to side v shaped road . the previous lovation changed into hoilday cottages so that people live more comfortable.

in the camping field two tent are present and numerous tree also in addition that parking are available at the corner side of road and in the solar panel.

this huge development helped us people live more comfortablely.

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the broad change from a farm to a site with visitor facilities, mentioning parking, camping, solar panels, a farm shop and holiday cottages. However, the account is incomplete and includes important inaccuracies: the sheep area is not simply changed into parking and camping, and the track is not wholly replaced by a road. The fruit trees, soft-fruit and vegetable areas remain, while the internal route is upgraded and new facilities are added. The barn’s relocation is also unclear, and the response gives little accurate comparison of the farmhouse and chickens, which remain in place. The overview is too general to capture the main pattern of change. The response is 13 words below the required minimum; use the extra space to report the retained agricultural areas and the main additions accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, a broad overview and details about changes and facilities. Some ideas are connected with phrases such as “more over” and “in addition,” so the reader can follow parts of the account. However, progression is weak: the description jumps from the track and shop to the barn, then to camping and parking, without a clear route through the site or a consistent comparison between 1950 and today. The final sentence repeats the general claim that development improved comfort rather than adding information. Organise the details by location or by retained and newly added features, and use clear references such as “the eastern section” to link sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant map vocabulary, including “farm shop,” “solar panels,” “camping field,” “barn” and “holiday cottages,” which helps identify several features. However, the range is limited and some choices are imprecise or awkward, such as “huge development,” “power consumption” and “the location of barn is changed from main road.” Spelling errors—including “communte,” “fruits tress,” “lovation” and “hoilday”—also make the description less clear and reduce control. Aim for precise terms for map changes, such as “converted,” “retained,” “added” and “relocated,” and check spelling carefully. Avoid unsupported evaluative language like “huge” and “more comfortable”; focus on what the plans show.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentences, for example, “the previous lovation changed into hoilday cottages so that people live more comfortable,” but control is weak and the meaning is sometimes difficult to follow. There are frequent problems with verb forms and tense: “the diagram show” should use subject–verb agreement, while past changes need forms such as “was converted” or “was relocated.” Articles and plurals are also often missing or inconsistent, as in “the location of barn” and “two tent.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation need attention, particularly in the long opening overview, where several ideas run together. Use mostly clear past-tense sentences to describe changes, and check each sentence for a subject, a correctly formed verb and appropriate articles.

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