Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.



 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

This map show before beechwood form simple and accurate for example nothing available special like shops, fields parking areas

But today the map shows before fruit trees with was not a farm shop but now fruit trees with a farm shop

Whose place on the ship alone in 1950 but now parking areas camping field parking areas solar panels

In 1950 barn farmhouse chicken together

Now the barn is separate

In the barn place replace the Holiday Cottage is a very good part

Because before Beech Wood Farm simple not many more things

But now very helpful and beautiful and things are more available than before

1950 is not available parking arrears how people where park car 🚖 anything very difficult for people but now there are parking facilities good 👍 for people like comfortable and enjoy their time

With a solar panel farm shop camping field and more things here, this place is very easy and comfortable calm relax

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to describe the changes between the two maps, but it fails to provide a clear overview or a structured summary. While some features are mentioned, such as the farm shop, parking, and solar panels, the description is fragmented and lacks the necessary analytical tone required for an Academic Task 1 report. The information is presented in a list-like fashion rather than a cohesive summary, and the lack of clear comparisons makes it difficult to follow the development of the site. To improve, you should group related information (e.g., accommodation, facilities, agricultural changes) and ensure a clear overview is provided in the introduction.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks logical paragraphing and clear progression. The sentences are disjointed, and there is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas together. The text reads more like a series of disconnected observations rather than a structured report. Referencing is often unclear, and the transition between the 1950s state and the current state is abrupt. To improve, you must use paragraph breaks to separate different aspects of the site and employ linking words such as 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'subsequently' to guide the reader through the changes.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, relying on basic words like 'things', 'good', and 'place'. There is little attempt to use precise terminology related to map descriptions or urban planning. Some phrases are awkward or non-standard, such as 'beechwood form' (likely meant 'farm') and 'parking arrears' (likely meant 'areas'). The use of emojis is inappropriate for an academic task. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of descriptive vocabulary, such as 'converted', 'expanded', 'installed', or 'demolished', to accurately describe the changes shown in the diagrams.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammar is significantly flawed, with frequent errors in sentence structure, verb tense, and word order. Many sentences are incomplete or lack a main verb, such as 'In 1950 barn farmhouse chicken together'. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the frequent errors often impede the reader's understanding of the intended meaning. Punctuation is also inconsistent. To improve, focus on constructing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and practice using basic conjunctions to combine simple ideas into more complex, grammatically correct sentences.

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