Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.



 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The comparison plan is given in between the farm of 1950 and same site today. The necessity is the mother of invention.

In the 1950, there is not that much development. Although development keep happening with the new era.

If we go back there was no parking but today it is. In the new era there will be solar panels that significantly reducing the electricity production load.

Toady camping field also introduced replaced by sheep.

At that time only tracks are there but now roads had been established that can be beneficial during rainy days.

Often people not only growing now they are selling too.

They are the producers and sellers also there will be no stakeholders anymore.

holiday cottages were m

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. Furthermore, the content is underdeveloped and lacks a clear overview of the main trends. While some features are mentioned, such as the addition of solar panels and the change from a camping field to sheep, the description is fragmented and lacks the necessary detail to fully address the task. The inclusion of irrelevant personal commentary, such as 'The necessity is the mother of invention', is inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 report. To improve, you must provide a structured summary that highlights the most significant changes between the two time periods without including personal opinions.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks a logical structure. The paragraphs are disjointed, and the ideas do not flow smoothly from one to the next. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and ideas, making the text feel like a series of disconnected statements rather than a cohesive report. The abrupt ending ('holiday cottages were m') indicates an incomplete response, which further disrupts the coherence. To improve, you should use clear paragraphing (Introduction, Overview, and Body Paragraphs) and employ linking words such as 'whereas', 'in contrast', and 'subsequently' to guide the reader through the comparisons.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is limited and often used incorrectly. Phrases like 'electricity production load' and 'no stakeholders anymore' are imprecise and do not accurately describe the features shown in the diagrams. There is a lack of academic tone, and the word choice is often repetitive or inappropriate for a formal report. To improve, you should focus on learning specific vocabulary related to describing maps and changes, such as 'transformed', 'replaced by', 'expanded', and 'converted'. Expanding your range of descriptive adjectives and nouns will help you convey information more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. Examples include 'In the 1950, there is not that much development' (incorrect preposition and tense) and 'Toady camping field also introduced replaced by sheep' (missing articles and incorrect passive construction). The sentence structures are mostly simple and often contain errors in subject-verb agreement and word order. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, which limits the ability to show grammatical range. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, correct use of articles, and consistent verb tenses when describing past and present states.

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