Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.



 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Today i would like to talk about a farm and comparison farm between 1950 to Today.

We told the information by selecting and reporting the main features of farm in 1950 and Today.

First i would like to talk about a farm in 1950.

In 1950 the farm outside have a river and a road cross the river.The road beside fruit trees and beside soft fruits and beside vegetables and beside chickens and farmhouse and barn and the full long track and the other side of track have sheep this is the farm in 1950.

Now i would like to talk about farm today.Today the farm give big archive the river and the road across the river and beside the road fruit trees and farm shop and beside soft fruits and beside vegetables and beside barm chickens and farmhouse and holiday cottage and the other side of the road parking solar panels and beside camping fields and beside again parking.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to adopt an appropriate academic tone, using conversational phrases like 'Today i would like to talk about'. While the main features of the farm are identified, the description lacks a clear overview or summary of the significant changes (e.g., the transition from agricultural to commercial/leisure use). The report is essentially a list of items rather than a comparative analysis. To improve, you must avoid personal introductions and focus on describing the spatial changes and trends between the two time periods. The lack of a clear summary of the overall transformation significantly limits the score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks logical progression. It is structured as a series of repetitive, simple sentences rather than a cohesive report. The use of cohesive devices is extremely limited and mechanical, relying almost exclusively on the word 'beside' to list items. There is no clear paragraphing strategy to separate the 1950s description from the current layout, and the lack of transition words makes the text feel disjointed. To improve, you should group related features together and use linking words like 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'subsequently' to guide the reader through the changes.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive. The word 'beside' is used excessively to describe location, which demonstrates a lack of range. There is no attempt to use precise terminology for describing maps or spatial relationships (e.g., 'situated in the north-east', 'replaced by', 'converted into'). Furthermore, there are errors in word choice, such as 'give big archive' and 'barm', which hinder clarity. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider variety of descriptive verbs and prepositions to explain how the farm layout has evolved.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammar is limited to very simple sentence structures. There is a persistent lack of subject-verb agreement and incorrect article usage (e.g., 'the farm outside have a river'). Punctuation is also problematic, with missing spaces after periods and a lack of complex sentence structures. The response consists almost entirely of simple, repetitive clauses. To improve, you must practice using complex sentences, such as relative clauses or passive voice, which are essential for describing changes in academic writing. Accuracy is low, and the frequent errors make the text difficult to follow.

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