Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The plane display the Beechwood farm in 1950 and the another site plane shows the latest update of the farm.
Overall, there is a significant changed in present site, as earlier the sheep area was empty but now it changed and there are various amount of facilities provided. The barn place also get changed and in by considering modern usage of electricity solar panels are fix.
To begins with, in 1950 the farm has only fruits trees but now at same place the shop is constructed to purchased fresh fruits with availability of parking facilities. Moreover, track are transformed into proper roads. The solar panels are the major highlighted changed to be notice. As well as , the camping field is build at the place of sheep. The barn is reshifted to the joining corners of the road and older place holiday cottages was constructed. Majorly the earlier farm does not hold any parking facilities but in today site there are parking facilities available.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the maps, such as the addition of the shop, parking, and solar panels. However, the description is somewhat disorganized and lacks a clear, analytical overview. While you mention that there is a 'significant changed', the summary lacks precision regarding the overall transformation of the site from a purely agricultural farm to a more commercialized, modern facility. Some details, such as the specific location of the barn, are described in a confusing manner. To improve, ensure you provide a more structured comparison between the two time periods and highlight the most significant changes more clearly in the overview.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow of ideas is often disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as 'To begins with' and 'Majorly'. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the spatial changes described. For example, the transition between the discussion of the barn and the holiday cottages is abrupt. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus to guide the reader through the spatial changes logically.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with several errors in word formation and collocation. Phrases like 'various amount of facilities' and 'barn place also get changed' are unnatural. There are also frequent spelling and grammatical errors related to word choice, such as 'plane' instead of 'plan' and 'purchased' instead of 'purchase'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic meaning, it lacks the precision and range required for a higher band. You should focus on learning collocations related to describing maps and changes, such as 'transformed into', 'replaced by', or 'converted into'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with verb tense consistency ('the barn place also get changed'), subject-verb agreement, and article usage. Sentence structures are generally simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often contain errors, such as 'the solar panels are the major highlighted changed to be notice'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the placement of commas and spaces. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures and proofreading for common errors like tense consistency and pluralization before moving on to more complex grammatical forms.
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