Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The Pie chart illustrates the age of members of library in 2016, while table compares the total loan by category in same year. Moreover, Bar charts present total number of loans between 2007 and 2016.
Overall, it can be seen that Adults (18064) accounted for the highest proportion in a library, almost half of total percentage, whereas, adults 65 and over had a least percentage. Moreover, children's fiction and adult fiction had the same loan percentage, while making it highest. All others categories were below 10 percentage, except adult non-fiction.
If we talk about age of library participants, adults (18-64) were 51%, as compare to children with 22%. By contrast proportion of young adults (13-17) and adults 65 and over were from 12 and 15 respectively. However, total numbers of loans between 2007 to 2016 remained between 15,000 to slightly above 20,000, with least number of loans in 2007, which was approximately 16,000, and highest number of loans in 2016, that is around 22,000.
In addition, in total loans by category in 2016, children fiction and adult fiction both were comprised 38%, whereas, adult non-fiction stood at 13%, by contrast, all remaining categories lies below 10% with children’s DVD's was at lowest that was 1%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 2.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 2.0
The response is completely off-topic. The prompt asks for a description of a farm site in 1950 compared to today, but the student has written a report about library statistics (age of members, loan categories, and loan trends). Because the student failed to address the actual task provided, the score for Task Achievement is severely impacted. While the student does report on the data provided in their own text, they have not fulfilled the requirements of the prompt at all.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, and there is an attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Overall', and 'By contrast'. However, the logical progression is undermined by the fact that the content does not match the task. The referencing is clear within the context of the library data, but the overall structure does not serve the purpose of the actual prompt provided.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student demonstrates a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe charts and tables, such as 'accounted for the highest proportion', 'remained between', and 'comprised'. There are some inaccuracies, such as 'all others categories' (should be 'other') and 'children's DVD's was at lowest' (should be 'were at the lowest'). Despite the topic mismatch, the lexical control is adequate for a mid-level band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('all remaining categories lies below') and prepositional errors ('as compare to' instead of 'compared to'). Punctuation is generally functional, though some phrasing is awkward. The errors do not consistently impede communication, but they are frequent enough to limit the score.
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