Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The graph illustrates the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today in the beechwood farm the various places are transformed from 1950 and today.
In the 1950 the beechwood farm has six major places it has near the fruit trees back side has main road right side river and left side Track it has three shops beside middle soft fruits, left side fruit trees and right side vegetables and now it has a some edge curve of track it has same left and right side in the middle farmhouse left Barn, right Chickens and ultimately out side of the track and main road it has a sheep.
To finish with today's in the beechwood farm it has transform many tress and fields, parking the river and main road was same but track replaced with road in the friut trees has space covered with farm shop other two soft fruits and vegetables are same the middle of road barn however barn was transform to holiday cottages othe two are same and sheep was replaced with two parking beside parking one side of Camping field and other side was Solar panels in the site tooday.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task by comparing the farm site in 1950 and today. However, the coverage of the main features is very limited and poorly organised. For instance, the student mentions that 'the river and main road was same' and notes the transformation of barns into holiday cottages and fruit trees into a farm shop. While some key information is reported, the overall selection lacks clarity and fails to provide a fully developed overview or well-integrated comparisons. The descriptions are often confused, leading to an incomplete representation of the provided diagrams. Consequently, the performance aligns with the Band 5 descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text suffers from significant structural and organizational issues. It is divided into three very long, dense paragraphs, but the sentences run on without appropriate punctuation or logical transitions. For example, the sentence starting with 'In the 1950 the beechwood farm has six major places...' is a massive run-on clause that merges multiple distinct ideas together. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, such as the awkward transitions 'To finish with today's' and 'in the site tooday'. There is no clear overall progression of information, making the text difficult to follow. This reflects the characteristics of Band 4.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive. The student relies heavily on simple words and phrases such as 'places', 'transform', 'same', and 'middle'. There are also frequent word choice errors and unnatural collocations, such as 'edge curve of track', 'friut trees', and 'out side of the track'. Less common lexical items are attempted with severe inaccuracy, and spelling mistakes (e.g., 'tooday', 'friut', 'tress') further reduce the clarity of the writing. The lexical range is limited and minimally adequate at best, corresponding to a Band 4 level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the response. The text consists largely of poorly constructed, run-on sentences connected by commas or conjunctions rather than proper subordination and punctuation. There are frequent errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions, such as 'the beechwood farm has six major places it has near the fruit trees back side' and 'barn however barn was transform'. The range of grammatical structures is very limited, with frequent errors that constantly cause difficulty and confusion for the reader. This performance sits firmly at Band 4.
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