Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.



 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The diagram illustrates the beechwoood farm before and after were made to its layout 1950, and now how it looking.

overall, it can be seen that the time period of 76 years ago slightly changed. on the left of farm there was a fruit trees, and soft fruits, but on the left of farm there is a farm shop. you can see map has been changed dramitacly.

looking at more details, the greatest changed can be seen in the bottom of the farm there was just a sheep. however, now totaley has been replaced with parking, camping field and solar panels, with parking where people park their cars and motorbikes.

in the farm right down there was a barm, farmhouse and chicken center where indiviual purchased meet for thier life.on the contray it can be seen that the farm right down side has been replaced with holiday cottages,where people spend their holidays.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The student attempts to describe the changes shown in the maps of Beechwood Farm between 1950 and the present day. However, the response fails to meet the core requirements of Task Achievement. Many details are inaccurately reported or misunderstood; for instance, the text claims that sheep in the bottom of the farm were replaced with parking, whereas the camping field and solar panels appear in different areas, and the eastern/northern features are confused. Furthermore, the overview is extremely vague ('the time period of 76 years ago slightly changed') and lacks a clear summary of the main overall developments, such as the farm's transition from purely agricultural use to commercial and tourist activities. Consequently, the task is addressed only partially, warranting a band 4.5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The text is divided into paragraphs, but the overall organization and logical progression are weak. The introductory paragraph is confusing and poorly structured. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as 'overall, it can be seen that the time period of 76 years ago slightly changed' and 'on the contray'. Referencing between sentences is often unclear, leaving the reader confused about which areas of the farm are being compared. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal flow of ideas lacks cohesion and clear signposting, resulting in a score of 4.5.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and frequently inaccurate. The student makes numerous lexical errors and spelling mistakes, such as 'beechwoood', 'dramitacly', 'totaley', 'barm', and 'indiviual purchased meet'. There are also inappropriate collocations, such as 'chicken center where indiviual purchased meet for thier life'. The range of vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, barely adequate for describing simple visual data. Due to the high frequency of word-choice and spelling errors that occasionally impede communication, a band 4.5 is appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. There are frequent errors in basic sentence structure, tense usage, and punctuation. Examples include 'before and after were made to its layout 1950, and now how it looking' and 'in the farm right down there was a barm'. Complex structures are rarely attempted, and when simple or compound structures are used, they often contain structural errors (e.g., missing auxiliary verbs or incorrect prepositions). Punctuation and capitalization are also erratic. These persistent errors place the response firmly in the band 4.5 category.

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