Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.



 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The plans show the development and changes in in farm during 1950 to till today. A lot of things have been changed till now.

Behind the track there was a space spare for sheeps or it seem that there was a sheep farm there, now there, four solar panels ,camping field and a tiny parking lot is settled. And in the camping field a tree also has also been grown.

and the track has been changed into a road. Where fruit trees were located,now there is also farm shop in that area.Moreover,the area of soft fruits and vegetables remained same.But now in place of barn the holiday cottages have been made and the chicken farmhouse is at its original place.Instead of this, the barn has been placed with the track. The flow of river is as same as it was before.

We have witnessed alot of changes and differenced made from 1958 till nowaday.In current time, the space is more utilized.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The student attempts to describe the changes shown in the two maps of Beechwood Farm. However, the response suffers from several weaknesses that place it in the lower-middle bands. First, there is no proper overview provided, which is a crucial requirement for Academic Task 1. The summary sentences are vague and repetitive, stating simply that a lot of things have been changed. Furthermore, some of the descriptions are inaccurate or confusingly phrased, such as stating that 'the barn has been placed with the track' or mixing up the locations of the new features. While the student mentions several changes like the solar panels, camping field, and farm shop, the overall selection and reporting of main features lacks clarity, structure, and professional analytical tone.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response is poorly paragraphed, beginning with two very brief and disjointed sentences followed by a dense block of text that crams multiple spatial shifts together without clear logical progression. Cohesive devices are weak and mechanical (e.g., 'And in', 'and the track', 'Instead of this'). Paragraphing is not used appropriately to separate different areas of the farm or different time periods. While the reader can generally follow the geographical movement from north to south, the lack of sophisticated transition phrases and poor structural division mean the text fails to demonstrate clear logical organisation and progression throughout.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The lexical range is quite limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic vocabulary ('changed', 'place', 'area', 'track'). There are multiple lexical errors and unnatural collocations, such as 'space spare for sheeps' instead of 'open area for sheep', 'tiny parking lot is settled', and 'chicken farmhouse' instead of 'chicken enclosure'. Spelling and word form errors also appear, such as 'differenced' instead of 'differences' and 'nowaday' instead of 'nowadays'. The vocabulary is adequate only to convey very basic meanings, occasionally causing difficulty for the reader due to awkward phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but grammatical control is weak throughout. There are frequent errors in prepositions and articles (e.g., 'changes and changes in in farm', 'from 1950 to till today', 'on the camping field a tree also has also been grown'). Verb tense consistency is problematic, particularly when shifting between past descriptions and present conditions. Punctuation is also careless, with missing spaces after commas and periods. These errors occur frequently and occasionally impede communication, placing the response firmly in the band 4 range.

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