Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-10-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The plans below illustrate the site of a beechwood farm in 1950 and the same site today. Overview the beechwood farm is change today.Former beechwood farm is today completely change in place different which fruits inside form shop and other side across the road become parking and camping field, solar plants and parking.Two things are not changing soft fruits and vegetables today is same.Beechwood farm had in the track today is become road.Beechwood farm had in 1950 the place barn ,farmhouse and chickens today is become in the place holiday cottage and the same things are not change so farm house or chickens.In the 1950 beechwood farm the sheep inside become parking area.in 1950 the track place nearly the vegetables sercoles road the opposite become barm.in the 1950 the sheep area so today are more change in place so become camping field and growing the trees.So today is farmhouse more changed than in 1950.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 3.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses the task only partially. While the student attempts to compare the 1950 map with the present-day plan, the overview is extremely fragmented and lacks a clear, coherent summary of the main trends. Some features are identified, such as the introduction of a farm shop, holiday cottages, and parking areas, alongside elements that remained unchanged like the soft fruits and vegetables. However, the ideas are limited, under-developed, and difficult to follow due to severe expression issues. The response attempts to cover key changes, but the lack of a proper overarching summary and logical progression keeps the task achievement at a basic level.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5
There is no clear overall progression or logical structure in this response. The text is written as a single dense block of sentences without proper paragraphing, and ideas jump erratically between different parts of the maps. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, resulting in mechanical and repetitive transitions (e.g., repeating 'today is become' and 'in the 1950'). Referencing is frequently unclear, making it very difficult for the reader to follow the spatial relationships between the old and new farm layouts. The lack of basic structural organization and cohesive links significantly impairs readability.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic, limited, and repetitive. The student relies heavily on simple terms and struggles with accurate word choice, word form, and collocation (e.g., writing 'form shop' instead of 'farm shop', 'barm' instead of 'barn', and 'sercoles road'). There are frequent lexical errors and awkward phrasings throughout the text, such as 'growing the trees' or 'the place barn'. While the reader can occasionally piece together the intended meaning, the restricted lexical range and persistent word-choice inaccuracies restrict the response to a lower band level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying almost exclusively on faulty attempts at basic or complex sentences. There are frequent grammatical errors in almost every sentence, including incorrect verb tenses, missing or incorrect auxiliary verbs, faulty prepositions, and severe problems with word order and sentence boundaries (e.g., 'Former beechwood farm is today completely change in place different which fruits inside form shop'). Punctuation is also poorly handled, with run-on sentences and missing capitalization. These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader and reflect a weak control of basic grammatical patterns.
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