Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

To discuss about the long holidays in primary and secindary institution ws it worth it or not and what is the value of thse holidays and secondely wants to favour in short time holidays

Long school time holidays in pakistan gives to the primary and seconday students to enjoy thier summer in house because in summer there wa very hard to go institution that was very hot and students can be ill so that it was long term holidays for the student to be safe in thier houses and avoid the hottness of sun be safe in thier own houses

Value of long school holidays is very high in pakistan because in pakistan in summer tempreture was very high and too much hot so childerns can be ill by the hot rays of sun that is why these smmer 2 months vocations worth it and valued for the family furthermore family can shedule a pcnic to the cold areas so they can enjoy these summer vocation in cold places and have trip experience

Argument which are in the favour for long holidays is that some student are studying in different areas and these vocatios gives them alot to go and meet thier families furthermore these holiday plays an important role in society that can overcome the diseases which produced by the heat vaves and hotnes at high tempreture which is very effective to a human body

Arguments for shorter holidays shorter holidays can be useful t thier career they will be in touch with the study and they wlll lean somethin and they will not loose interest from the study long term holidays may cause the loose intert n the study

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions and give relevant reasons for long holidays, especially protection from Pakistan’s summer heat, time to visit family, and opportunities for trips to cooler areas. You also identify a case for shorter breaks: students can stay connected with their studies and avoid losing interest. However, the response is only partially developed. The discussion of shorter holidays is brief, and the paragraph introduced as arguments for long holidays largely repeats the earlier points rather than adding a distinct argument. Your opening does not establish a clear, direct position on the value of long holidays or how the two sides compare. Develop each reason with a clearer explanation or example, and make your overall view explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: the response moves from an introduction to the value of long holidays, further arguments for them, and then the case for shorter holidays. Paragraph breaks help distinguish these topics. However, progression within and between paragraphs is limited, and the long-holiday points are repeated rather than developed in a clear sequence. Linking words such as “furthermore” and “that is why” are used, but connections are sometimes unclear or mechanical; for example, the paragraph about meeting family shifts to claims about heat-related illness without a clear transition. The opening is also difficult to follow. Give each paragraph one clear purpose, use topic sentences, and connect each reason to its explanation more precisely.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “summer holidays,” “temperature,” “career,” “interest,” and “family,” and you attempt phrases such as “plays an important role in society.” However, the range is limited and several spelling errors or inaccurate word choices make parts of the response difficult to understand, such as “vocations” for holidays, “hottness,” and “loose interest.” Some combinations are also unnatural, including “summer in house” and “cold areas.” Aim to use accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. Repeating “hot,” “holidays,” and “students” also limits variety; you could use more precise alternatives where appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example with “because” and “furthermore,” but the range of sentence structures is limited and these attempts are often difficult to follow. Errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries occur throughout. For instance, “in summer there wa very hard to go institution” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “these holiday plays” has a mismatch between the plural subject and verb. The opening is also a sentence fragment rather than a clear introductory sentence. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using subordinate clauses. Check subject–verb agreement, tense consistency, articles, and punctuation when editing.

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