Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

All over the world different types of weather, atmosphere, and also different enviornment. Many countries follow the own weather conditions for school holidays and timings.

To begin with, many countries faces the weather problems and also face different environment. If we talk about Pakistan, in which four seasons winter, spring, autumn and sammar. So, in sammar weather condition is so hot and dry that is why in summer primary and secondary school close for two to three months. After that in winter, weather in December last and January first so cold. That is why primary and secondary schools off in these days. The value of long time school holidays are to prevent students from weather. In Pakistan the months of June and July weather so hot almost temperature rise to 50 degree. If schools are not close than many students can not bear the hot and many chances they lost their life. So, government close the all secondary and primary schools off from 1st July to 15th August. Students spend more time in their homes.

Moreover, in many countries weather so cold that is why schools off in winter season. I have arguments in favour of shorter school holidays on one condition. If government provides all safety tools to schools than holidays decreases. Like in all schools in summar season provide full time electricity and also provides air conditioners. By this temperature maintain so students are in safe zone. Same thing apply in winter season, when weather so cold than government wants to in all the schools provides heater for maintain the temperature. If fulfill these conditions than temperature maintain and students are in safe zone. By this automatically longer holidays convert into shorter holidays.

In conclusion, if weather temperature maintain in where there is weather problem than this matter resolve it. By this the education system boost and students are comfortable and get better education.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses both questions: it explains why long breaks are useful in Pakistan’s extreme summer heat and proposes shorter holidays if schools have cooling and heating facilities. The examples of temperatures reaching 50 degrees and schools closing from July to mid-August make the first point relevant. However, the discussion is only partial: the value of holidays is mainly presented as protection from weather, with little consideration of rest, family time, or other benefits. The case for shorter breaks is also conditional and underdeveloped; explain how maintaining school facilities would allow learning to continue and why this is preferable to long closures. The conclusion repeats the weather-control idea rather than clearly weighing the two positions.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two main questions, and a conclusion. Sequencing phrases such as “To begin with,” “Moreover,” and “In conclusion” help signal the stages of the answer. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow: the discussion moves from summer heat to winter cold and then back to summer closures without clearly linking these points. Several connections are repetitive or mechanical, especially repeated uses of “That is why” and “By this.” Some references are also unclear, as in “If fulfill these conditions,” where the reader must infer what “these conditions” means. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each example directly to the point it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the main ideas about weather, school closures, and facilities, and terms such as “temperature,” “electricity,” and “air conditioners” are relevant to the topic. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are noticeably inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning less natural. For example, “different types of weather, atmosphere, and also different enviornment” is imprecise, while “weather problems” and “temperature maintain” are repeated rather than expressed more specifically. Spelling errors such as “enviornment” and “sammar” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise set of topic vocabulary and check spelling; for instance, distinguish extreme heat from cold conditions and describe facilities as helping to regulate indoor temperatures.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and longer sentences, including conditional forms such as “If government provides all safety tools to schools than holidays decreases.” However, many sentences contain errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, or sentence construction, and these can make the reader work to understand the intended meaning. Examples include “many countries faces,” “primary and secondary school close,” and “If schools are not close than many students can not bear the hot.” Sentence fragments also occur, such as “If we talk about Pakistan, in which four seasons…” and “Like in all schools in summar season provide full time electricity.” Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement and conditional structures. Greater control of these patterns would make the argument easier to follow.

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