Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In most of the countries, primary and secondary schools close for two or more months in the summer vacations.

For instance the summer holidays in many countries like Pakistan, India, Sri lanka and other asian countries helds for mostly two or three months. In these holidays the vacations homework are given to the students which is bascially for the engagement of students with study. But unfortunately, i would say that in most of schools the given vacations homework are not being checked by the school teachers.In this case, most of the times the students are being careless with thier studies and does not focus on the course.Because the reason for this they would say as it was i mentioned before the homework is not being checked by the teachers.Due to all this and the long period of two or three months they become non serious and thier attitude or behavior does not aligns with the studies.

The major reason from the other side you can say from school side is given the heatwave or very warm wheather which also affects the health of students.

In favour of short holidays, the mentioned effects of long term holidays can be overcomed by sorting it out.Because in shorter period of summer holidays students can kept engaged with studies and the change of behviour with the studies are due to lack of focus and change of attitude because they have no restrictions to study like in school where is a proper way for them.In shorter school holidays which i would say for maximum 1 month and it is task based .Dur to this students does not loose their focus on studies and their behvaiour can kept safe from lackness of regular schedule base timetable of study.

I can give example of this as i expericed, a younger brother of mine faced the same problems as i mentioned that he loose focus and his non serious attitude with study or school was changed. Due to this he had to do lot of hard work to keep him relative the school and studies

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both questions to some extent: you explain that long breaks can reduce students’ focus and mention heatwaves as a reason schools close, then argue that shorter holidays could help maintain study routines. The example of your younger brother also supports the point about losing focus. However, the value of long holidays is not clearly explained; the discussion mainly presents disadvantages, with heat and health mentioned only briefly. The case for shorter holidays is also repeated rather than developed with distinct reasons or evidence. Your position is therefore only partly clear and the ideas remain limited. To strengthen the response, explain benefits such as rest, family time or travel, and develop each side with a specific example. The eight words copied from the task prompt are excluded from the stated word count.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some organisation: the response begins with the context, moves to the effects of long holidays, then considers shorter breaks and gives a personal example. This gives the reader a basic sense of the discussion. However, the progression is difficult to follow because several ideas are packed into long paragraphs, and links between claims are often unclear. For example, “The major reason from the other side” does not clearly signal how heat relates to the value of long holidays, while “Because of this” is repeated to connect points without showing their precise relationship. The final example is not clearly separated from the argument. Use distinct paragraphs for each question, and make each paragraph develop one main point with clear, accurate transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary, including “heatwave,” “focus,” “restrictions,” and “regular schedule,” which helps communicate the topic. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, sometimes making the reader work to understand your meaning. Examples include “vacations homework,” “non serious,” “task based,” and “keep him relative the school.” Spelling and word-form errors such as “wheather,” “behviour,” and “expericed” are also noticeable. Aim for more precise academic phrasing and check spelling carefully. For instance, describe homework as “holiday assignments,” students as “disengaged from their studies,” and a routine as a “structured study schedule.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas using longer sentences and clauses, for example when explaining that students may lose focus because homework is not checked. However, these complex attempts are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. In “the students are being careless with thier studies and does not focus,” the subject and verb do not agree; “students do not focus” is needed. Other examples include “students can kept engaged,” “students does not loose,” and “their behaviour does not aligns.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation also need attention, particularly where full stops are missing between ideas. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and verb forms, and use shorter, controlled sentences before adding subordinate clauses.

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