Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

When the weather is turned in hot and it is difficult to going to the schools for the children because most of the temperature 30 to 35 degrees celcius are recorded in every day. Due to this problems most of the primary and secondary schools decided for the holidays whereby students keep living safe in the houses. Thats crucial for the students health.

Keep living two months in the houses most of the none serious students are are enjoying the holidays but the negative affect is they forgot his past study reminiscences. On the other hand intelligent students are missing the school time they want to as soon as going to the classes. Most families are not wanted his children study loss and they wish school will be early start.

On the other hand, work nothing is more invigorating that an excursion in the natural sights and sounds for the students. Holidays should be shorter because students will be only focused on his study goals. The benefits of shorter holidays students should be active in his mind because they attend the classes very soon so they prepared for the final exams by calm of heart and piece of mind.

For example,to be know with the fact that of keeping regular learning activity is crucial for accountability, dedication, leaderships and among many other traits and its habbit maintaint the quality of memory. To be very straightaway, i am still occupied with the thought of those achieving skills in shorter holidays its enough for his success.

In conclusion, Long holidays is not good for the student education holidays should be shorter due to this impact they dont forgot his past lessons.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions: the opening explains the value of summer holidays as protection from hot weather, while later paragraphs give reasons for shorter breaks, including maintaining study habits and preparing for exams. Your conclusion also makes your position clear in favour of shorter holidays. However, the discussion is only partly developed. The benefits of long holidays are mostly reduced to staying safe at home, and the case for shorter holidays relies on broad claims about students forgetting lessons or focusing on study. Explain these effects more clearly and add a relevant example, such as how a shorter break can help students retain learning while still allowing time to rest. This would make the response more complete and persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has separate paragraphs for the introduction, discussion and conclusion, and phrases such as “On the other hand” show an attempt to connect contrasting points. However, the overall progression is not consistently clear: the second paragraph shifts between students enjoying holidays, forgetting lessons and families wanting school to restart, without a clear relationship between these ideas. Some linking phrases are also repeated or do not accurately signal the connection, particularly the two uses of “On the other hand.” Referencing such as “they” and “his” makes it difficult to tell whether you mean students generally or particular students. Organise each body paragraph around one main argument, then explain and illustrate it in a logical sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary related to education and personal development, including “study goals,” “final exams,” “dedication” and “quality of memory.” This shows some effort to use a range beyond basic words. However, many expressions are inaccurate or unnatural and can make the meaning difficult to follow, such as “the weather is turned in hot,” “keep living safe in the houses,” and “calm of heart and piece of mind.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-form problems, including “celcius,” “habbit” and “leaderships.” Aim for clear, natural collocations rather than complex-sounding phrases: for example, say that students “stay indoors to avoid the heat” or “retain what they have learned.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You try to form longer sentences and use clauses to explain causes and contrasts, for example, “Due to this problems most of the primary and secondary schools decided for the holidays.” However, control of sentence structure and basic grammar is inconsistent, and errors frequently make the intended meaning harder to understand. Examples include “it is difficult to going,” “most of the temperature … are recorded,” and “most of the none serious students are are enjoying.” Agreement, verb forms, articles and pronouns also need attention, as in “Long holidays is not good” and “they dont forgot.” Punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent as well. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using correctly formed clauses.

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