Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more on the summer holidays. due to the high temperature and children's can not attempt their classes. from my prospective the value of long school holidays is comfortable for student but there are excess of drawbacks I give both of views.

On one hand, many countries, primary and secondary schools close two months in summer session due to the high summer the students can not perform properly and not able to attempt the classes regularly. In contrast, in many countries such as India and pakistan has long summer and short winter due to this there temperature goes to 46%, the students can not able to attempt their schools regular whereas there holidays are become more longer. In addition it is beneficial for children's to take a break on this warm days.

On the other hand, longer schools holidays excess of disadvantages a lot of students can not doing there work on holidays. moreover, serval effect on student career and miss wastes the crucial time on other activity such as many student waste of time playing sport instead of spend time in studying there home work. As a result, government and education organization devotes money on facilities such as installing pains for students and enable the role for shorter school holidays instead of long school holidays it is crucial for children's because its save a lot of time.

In conclusion, primary and secondary schools close for two moths play important role in students life privets form warm condition, enable student to do home works at home. however there are some drawbacks such as effect the career and waste a lot of time. I argue that shorter school holidays is beneficial for students.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions: you explain that long holidays give children a break from extreme summer heat, and you argue that shorter breaks could reduce wasted study time and help students keep up with schoolwork. Your final preference for shorter holidays is also identifiable. However, the discussion is only partly developed. The heat-related point is repeated, while the case for shorter holidays relies mainly on students wasting time and a vague reference to government spending on facilities. Explain more clearly how shorter breaks would benefit learning, and support each main point with a specific example. The opening also says long holidays are comfortable but have “excess of drawbacks,” leaving your position initially unclear. (The response meets the required length; 13 words copied from the prompt were excluded from the count.)

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting contrasting views, and a conclusion. “On one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help signal this organisation. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow because ideas are joined mechanically or without clear relationships. For example, the sentence beginning “In contrast, in many countries such as India and pakistan” repeats the preceding point rather than developing a contrast, and the connection between installing facilities and shorter holidays is unclear. Some references, such as “there” and “it,” do not clearly identify what they refer to. Group each paragraph around one main reason, then explain its consequence with a clear linking sentence.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “summer holidays,” “temperature,” “career,” “facilities,” and “crucial time,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or combinations are inaccurate enough to make meaning unclear. Examples include “temperature goes to 46%” (the unit should be expressed as a temperature), “attempt their schools,” “excess of disadvantages,” and “installing pains.” Spelling and word forms also need attention, as in “servral,” “moth,” and “privets.” Build a more precise set of phrases for discussing heat, attendance, learning, and free time, and check collocations and spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a reason clause with “due to” and a contrast introduced by “whereas.” However, control is inconsistent, and faulty sentence construction sometimes makes the message hard to follow. For example, “children's can not attempt their classes” has an incorrect possessive form and verb pattern, while “many countries … has long summer” has subject–verb disagreement. There are also problems with articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries, as in “shorter school holidays is beneficial” and the opening’s lower-case “due.” Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check agreement and punctuation. More accurate control of these patterns would make your ideas easier to understand.

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