Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

It is often argued that many countries primary and secondry schools proximate for two months and more in the summar vacation.in eassy arguments value for a long Schools holidays.when students go to his vacation after a long timed study period their brain,physical ae peacful.in other hand arugments favour for shorter holidays.in my think is for favour shorter vacation is thinking topic cause mane times shorter holidays are need.

In my opinion value of long time holidays are need for learners since that is need for after a long time study period cause students are always learning everyday they have home works,exams,and etc.But after a summer time students need a holidays.since many countries are close for long time holidays caus they thought that students need a break for some times in my think that is need cause always students are study sometimes they need freedom they have to playing talking with friends and families that on is need for a learner.after a long tims period when students come back to his clas they have refreshment on this mentality,physcial improve then students are more actives their study sites i think this value for long time holidays

In my aruged is favour of shorter holidays.first think is while a learners gives a shorter holidays teachers give him Home work and many activities then students go his vacation ,when they have shorter holidays they do not waste his time cause they have thought that after the vacation they go to Schools and teachers are give him home work and many topics they enjoyed their holidays and particularly they do their learning activities they do not stop that and after the holidays.

they considarbly foucsed on thks study that is the value of shorter holidays in my thinking

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both questions: you explain that long holidays give students a break from study and time with friends and family, and you argue that shorter breaks may help them continue learning and stay focused. These are relevant points, but they are only partly developed. For example, “they need freedom” and “they do their learning activities” are not explained with a specific consequence or example. Your position is also difficult to identify at the start: you mention arguments for shorter holidays, but later describe long holidays as necessary before stating your preference for shorter ones. Make your view explicit in the introduction and develop each argument with a clear explanation or example to address the task more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic overall structure, with an opening and separate paragraphs discussing long and shorter holidays. This helps the reader recognise the two sides of the question. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear, and ideas are joined in long strings, particularly in the paragraph beginning “In my opinion value of long time holidays.” Connectors such as “in other hand,” “since,” and “then” are repeated or used in ways that do not clearly show the relationship between ideas. The final paragraph also ends abruptly after “after the holidays.” Use shorter, complete units of thought, organise each paragraph around one main point, and use linking expressions only when their logical relationship is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “study period,” “home works,” “activities,” “refreshment,” and “focused,” and the reader can generally identify your intended subject. However, the range is limited and several spelling, word-form, and collocation errors make meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “secondry,” “summar vacation,” “arugments,” and “they considarbly foucsed.” Phrases such as “their brain, physical are peaceful” and “study sites” are also unclear or unnatural. Build a reliable set of topic vocabulary and check spelling and word combinations. Prefer precise expressions such as “take a break from academic pressure” or “maintain learning continuity” rather than repeating “long time holidays” and “need.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express reasons and contrasts, including longer sentences with “since,” “when,” and “after,” but these structures are often faulty, and sentence boundaries are not consistently controlled. For example, “In my opinion value of long time holidays are need for learners since that is need” has problems with sentence structure and agreement, while “when students come back to his clas they have refreshment” contains unclear pronoun reference and an incomplete grammatical pattern. Articles, plurals, and verb forms are also frequently inaccurate, as in “students are always learning everyday they have home works.” These errors sometimes make the intended meaning hard to follow. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine related ideas using one subordinate clause at a time, with careful punctuation.

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