Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

There is no doubt that there is in many countries have a long summer holidays for primary and secondary schools. This paper will investigate why many countries do that and the advantages of long summer holidays. Eventually i will try to state the advantage of long holidays and the favour related to the shorter ones.

As for the advantage of long summer holidays, i found that in many countries like tunisia and middle eastern countries on the summer the heat reach 45 degree or higher and that's a valuable reason for keeping children in a safer envirenment with their famlies instead going to school. Moreover its a good choise to keep childrens behind thier families for a long period because they needs to lern a lot of things about life maters and try to develop their knowledge by looking at their parents actions and that's will enhence their maturity.Moreover when they become adults they will remember a lot of memories with their families because of the long holidays. In term of the shorter holidays, children will found themselves more flexible on their study programs and facing less stress and teacher have much time to teach their programs and students themselves will found a lot of time for revision and preparing for the exams and why not participating on clubs or helpfull events related to nature or technology or lovely field. In conclusion, twice long or short holidays have benefits like enjoying more time with family or get a bit flexible time during study and less stress level and abaility to join good clubs or events

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions: the first body section gives reasons for long holidays, including extreme summer heat and time with family, while the later discussion identifies possible benefits of shorter breaks, such as reduced stress, more revision time and participation in clubs. These are relevant points, but they are not developed evenly. The family-learning and memory ideas are asserted rather than explained with a clear example, and the shorter-holiday arguments are compressed into one long sentence. Your opening says you will discuss the topic, but your position on which arrangement is preferable remains unclear. To strengthen the response, explain how each benefit works and support at least one point with a specific example, then state your view clearly in the introduction and conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: an introduction is followed by discussion of long holidays, shorter holidays and a conclusion. This gives the reader a basic route through the response. However, progression within the body is difficult to follow because several distinct ideas are crowded together, especially the sentence beginning “In term of the shorter holidays.” Linking words such as “Moreover” are repeated, and the conclusion lists benefits without clearly drawing together the comparison. Paragraphing would help separate the two sides, while clearer topic sentences and more precise references would make relationships between ideas easier to follow. Aim to use transitions to show contrast and cause, rather than relying mainly on repeated additions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “summer holidays,” “stress,” “revision,” “maturity” and “flexible,” and the reader can generally identify your intended ideas. However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling, word-form and collocation errors make parts of the response harder to understand, such as “envirenment,” “choise,” “famlies” and “helpfull events.” Phrases such as “keep childrens behind thier families” and “lovely field” are unclear or unnatural in this context. Build a more accurate set of expressions for discussing education and family life, and check spelling and collocations carefully. More precise wording would help you explain your ideas without changing their meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a reason clause in “because they needs to lern a lot of things” and a contrast between long and short holidays. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “There is no doubt that there is in many countries have,” “the heat reach 45 degree,” and “students themselves will found.” There are also problems with subject–verb agreement, articles, plurals and sentence boundaries; the long sentence about shorter holidays contains several ideas without clear punctuation. Practise building accurate sentences with one main idea, then add subordinate clauses and check verb forms and agreement.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.