Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In every country has diffrent rules and regulation of students. I largely agree with this view because while, I grew up attended the promary and secondary schools got the summer hoildays that time. I acknowledge that long school holidays could be affect on study as well it creates gap. However, this issue can be manegable with some twist like giving the homework or such academic tasks, meanwhile, students would enjoy study and hoilday at the same time.

Firstly, the holidays are must important in the schools. Furthermore, it's part of academic calender. In addition, the students can do the study for whole academic year alongside with exams and some diffrent activity. I think, they would deserve some reaxation and enjoyment in their life.

Secondly, In education system lot of teachers also working as like students for the whole academic year they are also deserve a vacation. Moreover, it's imporatnt for eduaction system to conduct the summer exams for students to moving them in next class, before that it's important to check their academic ability and then only decide in the same way the summer exams are final exams and it has been decided the students ability. This is alos a reason to giving the summer holidays for schools and students and every member in of schools.

admittedly, there are some issues to giviing the long holiday without any academic task and relevence study task. It can craete gap in students.

In conclusion, it's importnat for the stress and happiness of students and schools is matter more.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You recognise that long holidays offer students relaxation and enjoyment, and you mention that teachers also need a break. However, the response only partially answers the two questions. The value of long holidays is touched on, but the benefits are not explained in detail, and the second question—arguments for shorter holidays—is not directly addressed. The point that holidays may create a study gap is relevant, yet it is not developed into a clear case for shorter breaks, such as maintaining learning routines or reducing the need to relearn material. Your opening says “I largely agree,” although the task asks for discussion rather than agreement, so your position is not clearly matched to the prompt. Develop both sides with specific reasons and examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure, and signposts such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “In conclusion” help identify the stages of your answer. However, the ideas do not progress clearly from the value of long holidays to the case for shorter ones. The second body paragraph combines teachers’ need for a vacation with summer examinations, but the connection between exams and the value of holidays is difficult to follow. The brief paragraph beginning “admittedly” introduces a relevant concern but does not explain it or link it clearly to the earlier discussion. Some linking phrases, including “Furthermore” and “In addition,” are repetitive. Group related points together and use clearer references and transitions to show how each reason supports your answer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “academic year,” “relaxation,” “enjoyment,” and “academic ability,” so the reader can identify your general subject. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the response difficult to understand, such as “promary,” “manegable,” and “reaxation.” Some combinations are also unnatural, including “holidays are must important” and “conduct the summer exams.” Repeated use of “important,” “students,” and “holidays” limits precision. Build a more accurate set of topic phrases and check spelling and collocations; for example, describe holidays as “a valuable break” and explain that they “help students recharge” or “interrupt learning continuity.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including a contrast with “However” and a concession introduced by “admittedly.” Nevertheless, many sentences contain errors in clause structure, verb forms, articles, and agreement, which sometimes make the intended meaning hard to follow. For example, “In every country has different rules” lacks a clear subject, while “I grew up attended” combines incompatible verb forms. The long sentence beginning “Moreover, it's important for education system to conduct…” contains several ideas without clear grammatical control. Use shorter, complete sentences first, then add one well-formed complex sentence at a time. Check that each clause has a subject and verb, and review articles and verb patterns.

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