Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Well, it is always be a topic for debate that rather children should get a two or more months summer holidays or shorter school holidays in many countries. In my opinion, these holidays are really necessary for children peronal growth.

Long school holidays are necessary becasue children can work more on their different skills rather than just studying their course subjects. Because children nowadays are more into indoors activities, but by going to summer vacatios they get a chance to visit countrysides or different places as they go on a holiday. Also they can get a chance to spent a quality time with their familie. This thing clearly make their family bondings stronger. Also children can get time for doing different physical activities, like swimming, marshal arts, and etc. Also there is another benefit of vacations, if i talk about my childhood then in my summaer vacations, by kept far from my school and eachers, freinds, make me thrived more for going back to school. So for making them love the place they study, it is necessary to keep them a little apart of it.

Many people disagree with long school holidays, because they mmoght think that children these are more into video games and mobile phones and that they will spend their time more into playing them, but thats all about the supervigillence of parents. Also parents think that they have to become more available to their childre, well in this case they should have to consider this thing as a blessing because they can get a chance to do a good upbringing of their children as well.

These summer holidays are really essential for a good mental and physical health.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions and give a clear general view that long holidays benefit children’s development. Relevant reasons include time for physical activities, family relationships and renewed enthusiasm for school, with a personal childhood example. However, the discussion of the value of long holidays is much fuller than the case for shorter holidays. The opposing view is mainly presented as parents’ concerns about screen use and availability, then answered by saying parents can use the time for upbringing; this does not explain clearly why shorter breaks might benefit learning or routine. Several points are asserted rather than developed. To strengthen the response, explain the educational or practical advantages of shorter holidays and support each main idea with a specific consequence or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph supporting long holidays, a paragraph presenting concerns, and a concluding statement. The reader can generally follow the main ideas, and phrases such as “Also” and “because” signal additions and reasons. However, progression within paragraphs is not always clear, and “Also” is repeated frequently, making the links mechanical. The paragraph about opposing views shifts from children’s screen use to parents’ availability and then to upbringing without clearly showing how these points connect to shorter holidays. Some references, such as “This thing,” are vague. Use clearer topic sentences, group related reasons, and vary linking expressions while making the relationship between each idea explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate several relevant ideas, including “physical activities,” “family bondings,” “mental and physical health,” and “video games and mobile phones.” There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “quality time” and “upbringing.” However, the range is limited and some word choices or forms are inaccurate or unnatural, which can make the reader pause: “work more on their different skills,” “spent a quality time,” and “supervigillence” are examples. Spelling errors such as “peronal,” “becasue,” and “vacatios” are noticeable. Aim for accurate collocations and check spelling carefully; more precise vocabulary would help distinguish the benefits of long breaks from the arguments for shorter ones.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a reason clause beginning “because” and a conditional example introduced by “if I talk about my childhood.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “it is always be a topic” has an incorrect verb pattern, while “This thing clearly make” lacks agreement. The sentence beginning “Because children nowadays…” is a fragment, and “by kept far from my school” does not form a correct clause. There are also problems with plural and article use, as in “a quality time.” Practise building complete sentences with accurate subject–verb agreement and verb patterns, then proofread each sentence for clarity.

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