Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Around worldwide, primary and secondary schools are close for two or more month in summar holidays. Many people agree on long school holidays, while others argue this. In upcoming eassy we will discuss arguments on both long school and shorter school holidays.

To begin with, long school holidays are result of hot summer around world. In most of the countries temperature increases more than 40 degree celcius, which lead to several impacts on students in primary and secondary eduacation in form of various diseases. Long time ago when i was in grade 2 my friend get heat strokes due to high tempreature and later fever. Thus, many parents want long school holidays to keep safe their childrens , and i believe authorities must give vacations for more than two month.

On the other hand, long holidays have various disadvantages on students' education. In long vacations children are not get controlled by parents and spend their whole time in playing in hot days cause lack of education in the sudents. I remeber that in my summer vacations, I used to spent my time playing cricket outside home in high temperature. Therefore, many individuals belive this oppinion.

futhermore, many peoples believe it's useless to pay teachers in holidays, as they don't even teaches. Government pay teachers their pay even in vaction. So multiple parents argue to long holidays beacause of paying fee in vacations.

In conclusion, Long holidays are essential for the health of students to keep them safe from deseases. Many people aggred this while there are numorus of individuals who argue this. Pesonaly, I agree to more vacations in summer bacause hot weather have severl impact on lower educations.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both sides of the question and give a clear personal preference for longer summer holidays. The health argument is supported with a personal example about a friend suffering heatstroke, while the opposing view mentions reduced study and the cost of paying teachers during holidays. However, the response only partially develops the task: it does not explain the educational or personal value of long holidays beyond avoiding heat-related illness, and the arguments for shorter holidays are not clearly distinguished or fully explained. The point about teacher pay is also confusing because it says parents argue “to long holidays” when the context suggests they oppose them. Develop each side with a clear reason and explain how it supports that position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, separate body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “To begin with,” “On the other hand” and “In conclusion” help identify the main sections. However, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes unclear, and the opposing arguments are not consistently connected to the question. For example, the paragraph about teacher pay begins with “furthermore” but does not clearly explain how this supports shorter holidays; the following sentence then says parents argue for long holidays, creating a contradiction. Repeated references to “many people” also make the development feel repetitive. Use topic sentences that state each argument directly, then connect the example and explanation to that argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “heat strokes,” “temperature,” “education,” “vacations” and “diseases,” so the reader can generally identify the subject of each paragraph. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation and spelling errors make parts difficult to understand. Examples include “Around worldwide,” “summar holidays,” “keep safe their childrens” and “argue to long holidays.” Some expressions are also imprecise, such as “lack of education” for the effect of spending time playing rather than studying. Build a more accurate set of phrases for discussing learning, health and school schedules, and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a reason clause in “because hot weather have severl impact” and a relative clause in “which lead to several impacts.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in verb forms, agreement, articles, plurals and sentence construction. For instance, “schools are close” should use a passive form, “temperature increases … which lead” has faulty agreement, and “children are not get controlled” is not a correct verb pattern. The sentence about parents and teacher pay is also difficult to follow because its grammatical relationships are unclear. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then add subordinate clauses and check that each subject agrees with its verb.

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