Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In many countries, schools remain closed for two months durring summer. While long holidays provide students to relax and spent quality time with families. Meanwhile, short holidays provide educational motivation and continue their studies. So, in my opinion both holidays are necessary for students.

On the first hand, the long holidays are beneficial for the students and their parents. Students are tired from from hectac routine. Summer holidays made students relax from daily routine. Mostly parents move abroad to spent these holidays with children. For instance, some families moved to beaches to take sunbath because in fewer counties, where sun is not rising, so the moved to those counties where sun rised. Parents who are buzzy in daily routine life they did not given time to their children's. Therefore, the moved to those places where they given time to their family peacefully and spent lots of time.

On the secnd hand, short term holidays are also necessary for students due to hectic routine work. Students are waiting for holidays. After spending short holidays, they are more excited to continue their studies. Sometime, parents are buzzy in their own work and not given time to their families. In these holidays, mostly parents went to parks and meet with relatives where they cook food and eat meals in fresh enviroment and spent quality time with their families.

Conclusion, long holidays provide relaxation to their families and meeting with relatives. Meanwhile, short holidays are necessary for further study. So, both holidays are necessary for students.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both questions and give a clear overall view that both holiday lengths have value. The first body paragraph identifies rest and family time as benefits of a long break, while the second argues that shorter breaks can help students return to study with more motivation. However, these points are only partly developed. The beach example is difficult to follow and does not clearly explain how it demonstrates the value of a long holiday; the claim about countries where the sun does not rise is also unclear. The case for shorter holidays is less directly explained, since much of that paragraph shifts to family outings. Develop each argument with a clear explanation and a relevant, specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the paragraphs broadly separate the two sides of the discussion. Linking expressions such as “On the first hand,” “Meanwhile” and “Therefore” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the first body paragraph moves from student tiredness to travel, sunlight and parents’ routines without showing how each point connects. The second paragraph also shifts from study motivation to family activities. Some transitions are repetitive or awkward, and references such as “they” and “those places” are not always clear. Organise each paragraph around one main argument, then use explicit links to explain how each supporting detail relates to it.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a basic range of topic vocabulary, including “summer holidays,” “daily routine,” “relatives” and “continue their studies,” which makes the general subject clear. However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the message difficult to interpret. Examples include “durring,” “hectac,” “buzzy” and “secnd.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “provide students to relax,” “sun is not rising” and “spent lots of time.” Aim to learn accurate collocations for discussing rest, learning and family life, and check spelling carefully. More precise vocabulary would help you explain your ideas without relying on repeated words such as “holidays,” “students” and “time.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, and the overall meaning can usually be understood. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently, including in attempted complex sentences. For example, “While long holidays provide students to relax and spent quality time” is an incomplete clause with incorrect verb patterns; “Parents who are buzzy … they did not given time” has faulty clause structure and verb formation. Tense control is also inconsistent in “Summer holidays made students relax” and “parents went to parks,” where general claims are expressed in the past. Articles, agreement and sentence boundaries also need attention. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a correctly formed supporting clause before adding more complex structures.

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