Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Primary and sceondary schools are closed for two months or more in summer holidays,in many countries.

Summer holidays are usually the long break given to the students than winters holidays or any other. Long breaks make childreans mind fresh as they dont have any hectic routine, regular school, or homework to do.

They can take out time for themselves and self investment is the best thing ever.They can now spend more time with their families and get to know each other more by doing fun activities toghether.They can go out on a trip where students can explore new things and learn.Other than that they can focus on new skills as the holidays are long they can work on that skill, give it a time and make himself better in it.

Arguments are that people think after a long academic year students at least deserve long holidays so they can freshen up thier mind and get time to relax themselves.They are right on this view childrean do deserve long break after tough school year so they can come back with something new and adventerous.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify several benefits of long summer holidays, including rest from schoolwork, time with family, trips, and developing skills. These points are relevant, but they are mostly listed rather than explained with specific reasons or examples. The task also asks for arguments in favour of shorter holidays; instead, the final paragraph repeats the case for long breaks and does not present the opposing view. As a result, the response addresses the prompt only minimally and leaves a major part unanswered. The response is also 67 words below the required minimum, which limits the space available to develop both sides. To improve, explain the value of long breaks and give distinct arguments for shorter ones, such as maintaining learning routines or reducing pressure on working parents, with an example for each.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening, a paragraph about benefits, and a final paragraph. The ideas within the benefits paragraph are generally related, moving from rest to family time, trips, and skills. However, there is no clear overall progression towards answering both questions, because the final paragraph returns to the benefits of long holidays rather than introducing shorter holidays. Connections between ideas are often abrupt, and phrases such as “Other than that” and “They are right on this view” do not clearly guide the reader through the argument. Separate the two sides into focused paragraphs and use clear links that show contrast, cause, or example.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “hectic routine,” “self investment,” “academic year,” and “relax.” This gives you enough basic language to communicate the general ideas, but the range is limited and several choices or spellings are inaccurate, sometimes making the reader pause. Examples include “childreans,” “toghether,” “thier,” and “adventerous”; “make childreans mind fresh” is also an unnatural expression. Repetition of “long holidays,” “students,” and “time” further restricts the range. Build a small set of accurate topic phrases and use them in natural combinations, such as “recharge after a demanding school year” and “maintain academic progress.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response relies mainly on simple statements, with a few attempts to connect clauses, for example, “They can go out on a trip where students can explore new things and learn.” These attempts show some range, but complex sentences are often not controlled successfully. In “Long breaks make childreans mind fresh,” the possessive and agreement pattern is faulty; “as the holidays are long they can work on that skill” also needs clearer clause punctuation and reference. There are further problems with articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries, including the opening sentence’s comma placement and “a time.” These errors recur and can make relationships between ideas unclear. Practise accurate sentence patterns for giving reasons and examples, and check agreement, articles, and punctuation when editing.

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