Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is widely argued that many schools around the world close for two or more than two months for summer holidays. Some people think that holidays for two months is long period of time for the children who are learning in the schools. This essay will explain my perspective about the value of long time school holidays.

The primary reason why schools authorities given two or more then two months of holidays is that temperature in summer is too high is many countries temperature is about 50 centigrades. That is why many students are sufffered from health issues. For instance if schools open at 8:00 am and closed at 2:00 at that time sun rays at its peak that really damage the skin of students. In holidays some schools are given home works to their students of two months in order to engage the students to studies. So the best activities for students in holidays is that join some musical online classes specially for girls. The boys who are free in their holidays they can join the many sports activities to keep themselves active such as swiming and cricket but they have to go to the academy.

Another compelling argument is that short term holidays is more favourite amoung the people because children have less time to pass. So they can do many useful activities like girls is draw a painting and colours in it .Moreover for boys they can play mnay different games with their friends like on mobile phones they can also enjoy board riding.

To sum up I strongly believe that both these views as their own benefits for social activity. But I firmly, believe short term holidays is more beneficial for students rather then long term because they makes the students relax and unfocus for their goals.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both questions: the first body paragraph gives reasons for long summer breaks, especially extreme heat and students’ health, while the next discusses activities children might do during shorter holidays. Your examples, such as avoiding peak sun and joining sports or art activities, are relevant. However, the value of long holidays is not fully explained, and the case for shorter holidays is less clearly argued: saying children have “less time to pass” does not establish why shorter breaks benefit them. The conclusion gives a preference for shorter holidays, but the position is not consistently supported by the discussion. Develop each side with a clear benefit and explanation, and make the comparison between the two types of holiday more explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, separate body paragraphs and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its broad structure. You also use basic signposting such as “The primary reason,” “Another compelling argument” and “To sum up.” However, progression within paragraphs is uneven: the discussion moves from high temperatures to homework, then to music and sports without showing how each point supports the value of long holidays. Some links are unclear, and the second body paragraph shifts quickly between girls’ and boys’ activities. The conclusion introduces the idea that holidays make students “unfocus,” which has not been developed earlier. Organise each paragraph around one main claim, then explain and illustrate it; use linking phrases to show cause, contrast and consequence rather than simply listing points.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “health issues,” “home works,” “sports activities” and “summer holidays,” and the reader can generally understand the intended ideas. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “short term holidays is more favourite,” “board riding” and “unfocus for their goals.” Spelling errors, including “sufffered,” “swiming” and “amoung,” also make the writing less controlled. Aim for precise expressions that explain educational or personal benefits, and check spelling and word forms carefully. For example, describe students as “losing focus” rather than “unfocus,” and use “popular” or “preferred” instead of “more favourite.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a conditional example beginning “if schools open at 8:00 am,” and you use basic clauses to explain reasons. However, errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Examples include “schools authorities given,” “temperature in summer is too high is many countries,” “children have less time to pass,” and “they makes the students relax.” There are recurring problems with subject–verb agreement, verb forms, articles, plurals and sentence boundaries. Practise building accurate sentences with one clear main clause, then add a reason or example using a controlled subordinate clause. Proofread each sentence for a clear subject and correctly formed verb, and use punctuation to separate complete ideas.

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