Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Summer holidays are important thing for students to take rest from studies and refresh their mnd and body.In many countries,primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.No doubt there are so many reasons behind this statement,yet i consider shorter school holidays are better.I will discuss my view of points in upcoming pargraphs.

To begin with,there are so many reasons of long school holidays.Firstly,the weather is to much high.To explain it,summer holidays are delayed when weather is very high or hot. so that summer holidays are longer.Secondly,teachers are not available.To explain it,sometime teachers do not came school because they are going on trips with their family and also want to spend more time with their family.

However,there are many arguments in the favour of shorter school holidays.Firstly,some people are asking they spoiled the students study.To explain it,some people said that longer holidays are wastage of time of students.After taking long summer holidays students do not properly concentrate on their studies.Secondly,longer holidays can keep the interest low of studies in students.To explain it,students do not concenterate on their studies as earlier.They loose their interest regarding their studies.They take another leaves from schools and start playing at home respectively.

To conclude it,after elaborating above mentioned paragraphs i believe that primary and secondary should not delayed summer holidays for two months or more.This keep the interest low of studies in students.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a clear view that shorter holidays are preferable and address both the value of long holidays and arguments for shorter ones. However, the discussion of long holidays is weak: the claim that hot weather explains the break is not clearly connected to why a long holiday is valuable, and the point about teachers taking trips focuses on staff rather than students. The arguments for shorter holidays—loss of concentration and reduced interest—are relevant but mostly repeated and not supported with a specific example. The response contains 218 words, below the required 250; the 17 words copied from the prompt are excluded from this count. Develop each point with a clear explanation and an example to address the task more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two sides, and a conclusion. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “However” help signal the direction of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is often mechanical, with repeated “To explain it” phrases rather than fuller links between claims and supporting details. Some connections are unclear, particularly the move from hot weather to longer holidays and the final sentence about students taking “another leaves.” The conclusion repeats the preference for shorter holidays but does not draw together the main reasons. Use clearer references and vary linking methods so that each paragraph develops one connected line of reasoning.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough basic vocabulary to communicate the main topic, including “summer holidays,” “concentrate,” “interest,” and “studies.” There are also attempts to express evaluation, such as “wastage of time.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, including “weather is to much high,” “delayed” for holidays being extended, and “keep the interest low of studies.” Spelling errors such as “mnd,” “pargraphs,” “concenterate,” and “loose” also reduce accuracy. These issues sometimes make the reader pause to interpret your meaning. Build a wider set of precise phrases for discussing learning, rest, and school schedules, and check spelling and natural word combinations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with reasons, for example, “After taking long summer holidays students do not properly concentrate on their studies.” This shows an effort to connect ideas, but the range remains limited and complex attempts are often inaccurate. Errors include missing articles in “Summer holidays are important thing,” incorrect verb forms in “teachers do not came school,” and agreement or sentence-pattern problems in “primary and secondary should not delayed summer holidays.” Punctuation and spacing are also inconsistent, especially where sentences run together. Practise accurate article use, verb forms after auxiliaries, and complete sentence patterns; then combine ideas using controlled clauses rather than relying on repeated short explanations.

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