Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In many countries, primary and secondary schools remained closed for two monthes or more, some people thinks that it is good development while other believes that shorter leaves are more beneficial.

Majority of individuals thinks that long holidays in summer are golden chance for students and teachers in different views.

initially they thinks that when schools are closed for more then sixty days it is an viral opportunity for students and their teachers to get relax, furthermore they can spent more time with their families. For example when students and school staff is bond with their daily routeen they do not get relax and can not spent quality time with their beloved ones. additionally they do not have burden of work and other routeen related to their daily activities.

Other people says that there are more cons long holidays instead of prons. They thinks that there would be shortrt leaves in summer because of several reasons.

Basically, when there is long off from school the rich students and teachers goes for outing and spent a lot of time in visiting different cities and mountains. While poor students have nothing to do and they feel bore at home. Furthermore it os totally waste of time for students and teachers. For example if schools do not close for long time and they continue their work schedule, it is beneficial for children that thier smesters or study session closed within time and they can complete their degree realy instead of spending four or six months extra.

From my prospective, shorter leavs are more beneficial as compared to long holidays, because when children spent long time free they do not focus on their study. They totally waste time in different other activities and when they come back again in school then teachers have to revise all salybus again and it is loss of students study.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both questions: the first body paragraph explains that long holidays allow students and teachers to rest and spend time with family, while the next presents reasons for shorter breaks, including unequal opportunities for travel and disruption to study. Your final position is also clear: you favour shorter holidays. These are relevant points, but they are not developed evenly. The value of long holidays is mostly limited to rest and family time, and the argument about shorter holidays shifts to finishing degrees sooner without clearly explaining how shorter summer breaks achieve this. The claim that poorer students simply feel bored also needs support or qualification. Explain each main point with a clearer cause-and-effect link and a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two sides, and a concluding opinion. This helps the reader follow the broad direction of your argument. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear, and linking expressions can feel mechanical. For example, “initially,” “furthermore,” and “additionally” introduce points without showing precisely how they relate; “While poor students…” also needs a clearer connection to the preceding claim about travel. Some references, such as “they” and “it,” are not always easy to trace. Use topic sentences that state each paragraph’s main argument, then connect explanations and examples explicitly, with fewer repeated transition words.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “quality time,” “burden of work,” “beneficial,” and “study session.” These choices show an effort to discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of school holidays. However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand, such as “routeen,” “viral opportunity,” “bore,” and “sal ybus.” Some combinations are also unnatural, including “golden chance” and “waste of time” where a more precise explanation is needed. Build a reliable set of topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations carefully. More precise terms for rest, learning continuity, and unequal access to holiday activities would help express your ideas clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “when,” “because,” and “while,” so there is some variety in structure. However, control is inconsistent, and errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries sometimes make the reader work to understand the meaning. For example, “some people thinks” and “the rich students and teachers goes” have subject–verb agreement problems, while “they can spent” uses an incorrect verb form. The opening sentence also joins contrasting ideas without clear punctuation. Practise checking each sentence for a clear subject and verb, consistent agreement, and correct verb patterns; then use full stops to separate ideas when a sentence becomes difficult to manage.

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