Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In our country, primary and secondary schools give holidays for two months in the summer and other country also give holidays. The long vacation is a good periods for students.

There are many benefits of long summer vacation. The most intelligent students clear all books course in long vacation. The vacation gave a chance to students to prepare their course and gave well performance in final term. Many students ready for exams in this two months. This two month gave a chance to do well in there exams. Those students do not effort to prepare there lesson on this two months they do not get good marks there papers. This two months study change students performance. This holidays play important role on there study life.

Now, we talk about short school vacation. Short holidays can improve students studies. Short summer vacation gave opportunity to perform well and get good numbers. Some students get benefits for shorter holidays. They can again recall their lesson and ready for their test. Short holidays gave benefit to prepare your lesson and take a good result. The most students set a target to recall all classroom lessons in short holidays and do well. The most important thing is that to recall there lesson again and again and perform well on there exams.

I believes that long summer vacation and shorter summer vacation those gave benefits to student. It gave opportunity to perform well and got full numbers on final term exams. This opportunity gave benefits to intelligent students.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response recognises both parts of the question and gives a general view that long and short holidays can help students. However, the discussion does not clearly explain the distinct value of long holidays or develop convincing arguments for shorter ones. Most points focus on revising lessons and doing well in exams, repeated in phrases such as “prepare their course,” “recall their lesson,” and “perform well.” The benefits of a longer break, such as rest, family time, or enrichment, are not explored, and the case for shorter breaks is not clearly distinguished from the case for long ones. The conclusion says both are beneficial but does not establish a clear, reasoned position. Develop separate, specific arguments for each holiday length and support them with relevant examples or explanation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph about long holidays, one about short holidays, and a conclusion. The transitions “There are many benefits” and “Now, we talk about short school vacation” help signal the topic of each section. However, progression within the paragraphs is limited, as several sentences repeat the same idea about preparing lessons and achieving good exam results rather than extending it. Linking and reference are sometimes unclear, particularly in “Those students do not effort to prepare there lesson on this two months they do not get good marks there papers.” The conclusion also repeats earlier claims without bringing the discussion together. Organise each paragraph around one main reason, then explain its effect and use clearer links between sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which limits how precisely the response can explain its ideas. Words and phrases such as “good,” “gave a chance,” “benefits,” “perform well,” and “good numbers” recur, and some combinations are unnatural or unclear, including “clear all books course” and “get full numbers.” There are also word-form and spelling problems, such as “periods” where a singular form is needed and repeated “there” for “their”; these belong to vocabulary control rather than grammar. The reader can generally identify the topic, but these choices sometimes strain understanding. Build a wider set of accurate expressions for school breaks, revision, rest, academic performance, and exam results, and check spelling and collocations when editing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response relies mainly on short, simple statements, with little variety in sentence structure. Errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. For example, “The long vacation is a good periods” has a subject–complement agreement problem, while “I believes” and “This two month gave” show errors in subject–verb agreement and number. Tense and sentence construction are also inconsistent in “The vacation gave a chance to students to prepare their course and gave well performance in final term.” Several sentences join ideas without clear punctuation, as in the sentence beginning “Those students do not effort.” Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled clauses using because, while, and which; check agreement, articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries.

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