Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries, primary and secondary schools close for two months or more in the summer holidays.

What is the value of long school holidays?

What are the arguments in favour of shorter school holidays?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In many countries ,primary and secondary schools close for tow or more months in the summer holidays.In some counties normally there are short winter break and a small summer break .people belives that having a long break is beneficial for students while other think there should be a small break is better for learners.Lets under stand which opnion arguments are more strong.

people who think that a long break is benefical for students believe honestly students have a academic pressure of studies .Moreover children spend large proportion of their day in school so they should spend some time in the company of their family members .Long term leave provides students opportunites to get relaxed,spend time in playing and improving physical health. They can also learn many new skills and develop their personalities significantly.They get chance to visit northren areas with their families even for two or three weeks .Many muslim famlies arrange Umrah trip in long term holidays.

On the other hand children become lazy when they cannot continue learning process for long time.They losse attention in studies because there is a long break in study process.They feel difficulties in following rules and regulation again when they back to school.Some time they become physically weak when they could not attend extracurricular activities and not get chance at home to countinue physical activities.

In my opnion children get short break after every tow or three months in a year approximately half or one month.This short break would not distracte children from study process .They get chance to spend time wi

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both questions by explaining benefits of longer holidays—family time, rest, physical health and learning skills—and giving reasons for shorter breaks, such as maintaining attention and routines. The examples of visiting northern areas and taking an Umrah trip make the discussion more specific. However, the response only partially develops the task: the arguments are mostly listed rather than explained, and the final position is not fully clear or supported. The conclusion begins, “In my opinion children get short break,” but ends before completing the recommendation or explaining how it balances the two sides. Develop each main point with a clear explanation or example, and state your position consistently. The response contains 250 words, including 9 words copied from the task prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: the response moves from the value of long holidays to arguments for shorter ones, then begins a personal view. Paragraphing helps distinguish these sections, and signposts such as “Moreover” and “On the other hand” show the intended contrast. However, progression within paragraphs is often a sequence of loosely connected claims, and the final paragraph is incomplete, so the overall argument does not reach a clear ending. Some linking is mechanical or imprecise, as in “Some time” and “when they back to school,” and the opening spends space introducing the debate without clearly setting out the writer’s position. Use clearer links between cause and result, and finish with a complete conclusion that summarises your view.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “academic pressure,” “physical health,” “personalities,” “extracurricular activities” and “study process.” These choices help communicate relevant ideas about school breaks. However, the range is limited by repeated general words such as “break,” “students” and “long,” while frequent spelling and word-choice errors sometimes make the reader pause: “benefical,” “opportunites,” “loose attention” and “countinue.” Some combinations are also unnatural, for example “spend time in playing” and “get chance.” Aim for accurate spelling and more natural collocations, and vary repeated terms with precise alternatives such as “holiday period,” “pupils” or “retain learning.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a reason-and-result structure in “children become lazy when they cannot continue learning process for long time.” This shows an effort to connect ideas rather than relying only on short statements. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in articles, agreement, verb forms and sentence boundaries can make the meaning less clear. Examples include “students have a academic pressure,” “other think,” and “when they back to school.” Punctuation and spacing are also inconsistent, particularly around commas and full stops. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly formed subordinate clause, then check articles, subject–verb agreement and verb forms during proofreading.

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